when you walk i watched in awe
when you sing i strain to hear more because it's beautiful
your eyes is as a raven
your hair the scent of strawberries
and your skin a tan of light brown
and every touch just makes me want to hold you more
everything around you is bright and flourishing
without you it's dead and dull
you make everything alive and magical
your intelligence is far beyond my wildest dreams
and your lips a shade of rose
everything you do you plan with thought and wits
that's why everything you do i love you and your beautiful mind
Author notes
prompt 2
A contest entry
- ... Femme Noir...Leopold Senghor by Peteskid.
1000 points, ended April 12, 2008, 9 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
please tell me what you think and do you like it?
Comments
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This is a direct and ambious display of love/respect/admiration. A wonderful read. Write on. One.
Dez -
Wonderful... open,honest from the heart here, poetry as it should be full of important values and deeper feelings that come to us as we write. Well expressed views that seem heartfelt and sincere. Thank you for this fine entry into the contest and best of luck in the judging...PK
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...because it is beautiful - a simple phrase that says it all.
Beautiful words of love, and care, and affection. You have done very well with this prompt. Best wishes in this contest. ~Pamela 
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Wow. So like is this about someone in particular? Whoever it is must really rock your world cuz this is absolutely beautiful!!! Great write!
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