Hidden away under my lock and key
lies deep, in morbid grief, a loving heart
that desires, finally, to be set free
from painful things that have torn it apart.
With each beat it pumps its sadness; it bleeds,
its growing pain into a closed chest
of its simple, unrequited needs
that have never been fully expressed.
With trembling hand you deftly pick away,
like a common thief in the moonless night.
To open, yes, this very endless day
what I have kept so long hidden from sight.
Criminal, With great stealth and some pleasure,
has walked away with golden treasure.
A contest entry
- My 50th contest for rhyming poems... 20 poets, 790 points by Manoj Sanyal.
700 points, ended March 27, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Anything Goes!! by HowardsDaughter.
350 points, ended April 25, 2008, 34 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Criticize freely, I need input to improve
Comments
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Sweet!
Kewl rhyming scheme. You are such a sensitive man and poet. And you're a Capricorn? What are your rising and moon signs?
Love this one my friend, as it bespeaks a part of you I do not see very often.
Blessed Be~
)O(
db
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This felt so sad, how I have been feeling over this past year really. Deeply hurt by someone who said they loved me, but their actions spoke louder than the words I Love you. I know what it is like to be hurt in love, not learnt my lesson on that one yet. I always try not to hurt others.
Love ~sweetness~
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Beautifully penned, and deeply emotional. So many fall for the stealer of hearts and love. You knocked this one out..I loved it...novy
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OMG ~~~ WoW,
what a deep piece of poetry you have penned here.
so full of emotions, very sad story you told.
excellent writing.
loveandblessings2u & yours always
Joyce
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It was a gut check
Guys, sometimes, hate to admit that they can hurt. My heart is a treasure I forget to respect. In turn, I forget that I can hurt others. Thanks for the critique
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Great write, thanks for sharing.
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very nice sonnet.
But my contest requirement is minimum 20 lines.
Thanks for participation.
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