Baby it's killing me to be without you,
Remind me why we're doing this again.
I can't go on without you,
Never will I feel alive while you're
Gone away from me.
Maybe just maybe we can make it through
Everything that's dragging us down.
Together we can save ourselves,
Only if the two of our souls can combine.
Love of mine I still need you,
If I'm to let my heart care for others.
For my love I only ask one thing,
Every breath we take together,
Use it to bring me to life.
Author notes
Inspired from the Evanescence song "Bring Me To Life"
Which if you don't know the song, can be found on my playlist here:http://www.playlist.com/node/29012575
A contest entry
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Wonderful
It was very pretty. Thank you for entering and good luck! -
cool. def sounds like a good song, even though it's already based on one
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hey this was pretty! you did a great job! i was captured with this poem. thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! NineTailedFox
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Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck, Josie
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I was just about to comment this one when you entered xD
Very emotional and real. I like it. Thanks for entering and good luck ^.^ -
I like the end of this, but I don't like the start. It's too 'lyrical' in that way that most songs I don't like have. It sounds whiney and I really don't the beginning, but I do love the last few lines. Because they sound intelligent and beautiful, unlike the rest of the piece.
Thankyou for entering and good luck
Katie -
this is just so beautiful! it made me think of my man! awww
lovely write! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! NineTailedFox
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I love that song...and I also love this poem great job and good luck in all your contests
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yea i know the song and have used the title. is Bring Me to Life what you were using as your entry?
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Nicely Done!
Just messaged you moments ago and was reading this one now. stuck out for me. I listen to alot of Evanescence so the title pulled me in from the get go. You definately did it justice. Really like this one and can relate to it very well. not so much currently but in the past. Good job!
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I really like this poem! I have a personal attachment to this song actually, and I think it was great inspiration for a great poem. Although it is a very clichéd idea, it still is just as effective. I like how you broke away the final line from the rest of that stanza because that added emphasis to it and it also is a powerful line. I do, however, think that the title could be more inventive, especially since it was based off of that song. Anyway, it's a great poem and good luck in the contest!
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beautiful
your words ring so true...and i hope you do get to come back to life...good luc -
damn
damn this is a good poem inspired by a good song. i loved reading it. great write -
Its really good Kass. You can tell the song was the inspiration for your poem since you mirrored a line or two. kepp up the writing. I enjoy reading your poems.
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this is really good!
i can really feel the emotion =)
keep up the good work
ur writing just gets better and better! -sarah =)
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