she soars in rarified air
with plumage primped -
surveying lesser specimens
as jaded eyes catalogue and criticize.
a world perceived from feathered nest,
entitlement in elemental breaths,
her jeers mock puffed up pouter pigeons
who dare to fly too high.
eggs clutch in comfort,
blithly borne to tree tops
by privileged ancestors
who assume achievement,
mistaking access for accomplishment.
helpless, fair haired hatchlings
nestle under protective wings
consuming regurgitated truths in flocks of favor;
awaiting their turns to take flight,
a migration of the elite.
Author notes
The Blue Jay is adaptable, aggressive and omnivorous, and has been colonizing new habitat for many decades.
Blue blood is an English expression recorded since 1834 for noble birth or descent; it is a translation of the Spanish phrase sangre azul, which described the Spanish royal family and other high nobility who claimed to be 'pure', free of Moorish or Jewish blood, being of Visigothic descent.
A contest entry
- Contest NO GREENS - ROUND FOUR - INVITATION ONLY by Pamela A Lamppa.
7000 points, ended April 13, 2008, 10 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Excellent...
Impressive depicting and imagery.
I have enjoyed the reading of "Haughty Jays".
In admiration,
Andre Emmanuel Bendavi ben-YEHU
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Good solid metaphor to this prompt. Well done. Best of luck in the judging. ~Pamela
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Certainly an offering of solid metaphor
This verse is focused and creates strong
visions of these birds and habitat.
Offering a truth of judgemental beings
to us in shades of blue sky and wings.
Blue
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wonderful mataphor
I like the image of the jays; a wonderful metaphor and truly indigo. I agree with all the comments made before, but I will add that I enjoyed your poem, which is unique in its language use and vivid in its imagery.
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The amazing thing about this contest Is that each of us brings something wonderful to the plate, there is not more that I can say that has not been said below me by Joyce
The imagery that played out was wonderful.
Blessings.
Frozentearz
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Liz, Bravo my dear sis on this incredible piece you penned here. The metaphors are more than solid and I loved the subject. I had entertained thoughts of using the indigo bunting, though I went to my love of the sea after sitting for hours unable to come up with something for the bird. Elegant verbiage and a smooth flow created imagery abounding in my mind's eye and I was able to see the jays who frequent my yard every year. Thank you for sharing the gift of your illustrious pen once again with all of us and best wishes in this round. The talent here is so amazing. Love and hugs, Joyce
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i like your unique take on the prompt... so creative. best of luck in the contest.
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