Growing more distant with every passing day
Only hurting herself with her insecurities
Remembering the days when she was perfect inside
Glaring at her reflection in the mirror now as
Every day she tries to forget that her
Outside appearance doesn't match the inside
Underneath the make-up and black clothes
She's still gorgeous in every way possible.
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Option 5 : "Hold your head up gorgeous, because there are people that would kill to see you fall"
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nice. a subtle acrostic which still works well...i tend to find acrostics (even my own) really forced. it really got me because i have a friend who this could basically be describing, especially;
"Underneath the make-up and black clothes
She's still gorgeous in every way possible."
lol. she found a boy and is no longer really goth but your poem really reminded moe of her and that's awesome. all in all, good write.
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A great inspiring poem that I think more teenage girls should read. Well done acrostic. Thanks for entering and good luck (in my content and the others)!
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i am surprised u have not won a trofy yet this poem was so short but i mean soo relatablt to many!!!!good luck x
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Awesome!
I usually HATE these kind of poems, cuz they never work, never fit together.
But this actually flows together fluently. Wonderful job, Kass!
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I like this. Great message, and written well. I don't like acrostics normally, but this one works really well.
Thankyou for entering and good luck
katie -
Beautiful acrostic & so very true. People will try to bring others down, but never for one second they should let those people win, because no matter what at the end of the day they're still beautiful.
Excellent write
Best of luck & thanks for entering
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Great acrostic, I love the irony and mirrored comparison of the human facade to their personality. The conflict is classic.
Good Job, Sean
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nice acrostic, you did a great job with that word and it says so much, good luck in the contests, keep writing, -Amy
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I know what its like to hide the person you really and put on a different exterior than you really are.
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really tho
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i ♥ what youve done with this quote
i can so relate
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This describes many many girls I know. Thanks & Good luck
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terrific acrostic hun its a beautiful poem ! keep up the fantastic writing!
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I know this defiantely describes me to a T. Well done, it's very relatable and true.
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This is a very creative and emotion filled write.
Love how the title and the first letter of each line are the same.
I love these lines:
Growing more distant with every passing day
Only hurting herself with her insecurities
Most people don't see that they really hurt themselves the most with their insecurities. They pull away from everyone who really cares about them and believe all the lies floating around in their heads about themselves. Very self-destructive.
Excellent write!!
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this is so relatable, gorgeous beneath the appearance, wow, well penned
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this was wonderful =)
i could feel the emotions
ur really good =)
keep up the good work!
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