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Rescue You

I died on a hot summer day of 2006 in Iraq,
an AK-47 bullet to my chest.
They say it was friendly fire, 
this might be true.
Most American soldiers don’t shoot AKs,
I will believe them anyways.
Today I have come to rescue you.
I can’t let you die out here,
Death, I used to fear.
That’s what happens
when you risk your life,
for your country, your family and your wife.
I want you to return to yours, I couldn’t return to mine
I have come to give you hope, my wings should be a sign.
You will live I promise you,
Iraq will not take your life too.

Author notes

photo promt: photobucket
see the photo at this contest: http://allpoetry.com/contest/2397579

I'm an Army wife and i was crying while writing this poem.
this is the only one of my poems i could come up with about a fallen solider.

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  • SilverWolf
    September 17, 2008
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    awww that is really good!

    *adds to finalist list*


  • coffeeangel316
    May 12, 2008
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    wonderful poem. I think this is an awesome job. great write.


  • Dorcha Runda
    May 3, 2008
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    I love this, Thanks for your entry and good luck.


  • Jack22
    April 10, 2008

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    This was a very well penned piece and it needed to be written...

    Jack


  • Tarja
    April 10, 2008

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    Congrats on the honorable mention... this was so real... and so sad. Thankfully I have no family or friends fighting but I am a big and proud supporter of those boys and I think this piece reflects on what many of them go through... the reality of this made it that much more emotional. Well done thank you for entering and good luck.


  • yourhot21
    April 9, 2008

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    All I can say is this was AMAZING! It brought tears to my eyes! With only a few lines, you said soo much! Great job!


  • Pollycheck
    April 7, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my military contest. This poem has a great theme behind it, but I have to admit that I found it a little bit hard to read with the background and font. I am starting to get up there in years you know.


  • MrsJones
    March 30, 2008

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    I respect this poem, and I like it very much. I am sorry for your loss. However, this contest I'm hosting is a "gay pride" contest. I'm sorry you misunderstood me.


  • Desire gold member
    March 29, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: Rescue You
    This piece tugged at Spirit and swelled the eyes
    The sacrifice made should never be forgotten
    nor taken for granted
    Powerful verse with images seen also felt through Your words

    These lines grabbed and pulled~
    Death, I used to fear.
    That’s what happens
    when you risk your life,
    for your country, your family and your wife.
    I want you to return to yours, I couldn’t return to mine
    Fantastic take on the prompt~

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • grannyeri gold member
    March 26, 2008

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    Liked the poem and even more so when I saw the picture prompt that was given to inspire writers for this contest. We all have guardian angels and how wonderful that this solder had one who knew what was happening and had gone through it before. Could you please comment on my Comment Please? Saw that you had read it but not commented. Would be pleased if you did that when you have time. Thanks..


  • Sarah957
    March 26, 2008

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    This is nice. Wouldnt it be comforting if you did know that the angels would absolutely protect your loved ones? I know I'd sleep a lot better at night.
    I can relate to this, my husband is in Iraq right now and I hope the angels will sheild him as well.


  • S a r a h 4 5
    March 26, 2008

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    aww this was really touching amy!
    plus the backgroud really goes with the poem
    we all wish our soldiers out there could all live. all we gotta do is just hope for the best =)


  • something-or-other
    March 26, 2008

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    very good
    and very powerful.
    i love the voice and tone you used in this poem. it is what made it so beautiful and liberating in a sense.


  • SpiritMother
    March 26, 2008

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    My tears were welling long before I got to the 5th line of reading. Your emotions are strong and forthright..So much War and so much Hate..when will it end. I stand beside you in prayer today.Blessings to you and yours always!

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