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On my edge, and not I

A coin on its edge 

  A thing that slips

  in and out of deep dreams

  with complete unease

  to steal sleep and stay alone

    as long as she can

 

  A mark

  on another sheet of paper

  a piece of information

  made public in the gulping air

  of half-a-century back

  who did this

  said that

  felt something else

  then fell to whoring

    maybe

 

  A person

  of whom all say

    Who is she?

  even when they know

 

Another bright idea sliver-shod

and jogging along in silence

dogged by words and whirling flocks

of fine-coloured birds

 

A mantis myself

  bind me as you find me

  as I am known

  still alone and homeless

  a shameless biography

  of someone else’s writing

  defined by time

 

And there

  That is me

  cornered and covered

    and not I

 

 

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  • PageTurner
    April 18, 2008

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    No matter how you flip the coin,
    this is a winner! You definitely have the edge!!





    Nice to meet you, Scribe.

    ~ Nicky♥


  • Exit-Stage-Right
    April 2, 2008

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    And so you are

    one each of every summer flower... a bouquet to all who step in the secret garden of your wit and wisdom. You're prodidgy and mentor, envelope and letter, and for most of us, our true poetic better.


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      April 2, 2008
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      Well I'd dispute the latter, but thank you.

      (And you rate a mention on my front page)


  • Pure Thought silver member
    March 30, 2008
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    So well done ! ! !

    There is the question if others, me included, can follow suit.


  • Amera gold member
    March 27, 2008

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    abstract free verse poetry at its finest. I’m impressed with this poem and also with what is the real “you”. Bravo!

    Love,
    Amera


  • Randomly Beautiful
    March 26, 2008

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    This is exactly what I am looking for. So very well done. I was worried putting this contest up. I hope all the entries are just this good.


    • Mairi bheag gold member
      March 27, 2008
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      I hope you get some good responses and entries too. Thank you for your kind comments.


  • Dalaney gold member
    March 26, 2008

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    O...

    you leave me wanting to write forever -
    you are such an inspiration

    "and there
    that is me..."

    Love, lane


  • zochit2me gold member
    March 26, 2008

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    This is fantastic and covers the prompt perfectly.



    I love all the details you put in about who you are without using the "I" word...
    really good stuff here

    Becky

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