Life slowly trickling to the ground,
he lay with closed eyes.
No one could hear,
his weak , painful cries.
Radio gone, no where to be found,
His life slowly ebbing away.
Letting his mind wander
into sadness and disarray.
Suddenly at his side a sound,
A medic arrogantly stood
smiling, a goofy, silly grin.
Saying, Not today my boy, Not today!
The Demon doesn't win.
Author notes
This poem flickered through my mind the minute I saw the photo..may be a few extra lines longer than 10..
A contest entry
- - Wednesday Quickie to Work that Quill - by Desire.
700 points, ended March 29, 2008, 10 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What did you think
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Brilliant, a very worthy gold winner. An excelent write to go with the picture, well done
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*salute*
I'd like to think that medic was an angel sent to him by God. Beautiful words here.
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So beautiful this is
I truly believe the angels are about our men always and help them fight for life beautiful write
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masterful !
I love it how you can shapeshift from playful to deadly serious and hide profound messages in each of your poems ...
thank you, mother,
maa
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A piece that really does connect to the reality our own, really penned this well with great message within this work of art, penned so wonderfully~
Rena~
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I loved your poem.
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Thank You!!
Thank You for Your entry: Not Today!
This piece tugged at Spirit and swelled the eyes for I Love the tale told...felt as if there...
Could see the images unfold...the pain through
Your words...very vivid...
Magnificent rhyme~~
Powerful message spoken also felt from the Heart
These lines grabbed and pulled~
Suddenly at his side a sound,
A medic arrogantly stood
smiling, a goofy, silly grin.
Saying, Not today my boy, Not today!
The Demon doesn't win.
Fantastic take on the prompt~
Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
**Judging will be done shortly...
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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I love your take on the medic. And those words "Not today" ring in my brain. Because that day comes for all of us
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l0ve it
by now you probley know im an army wife and this contest is touching to me, i really like how you choose the title and how you said that the medic is telling him not today, good luck in the contest and keep writing, -Amy -
Angelic dreams
I like the angelic theme to this poem, thanks for sharing good luck if it is for a contest.
Moon
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Awesome! Great take on the picture. Very well written.
Good luck in the contest.
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