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In The Midst

 

 

 

Conflict collects victims in burlap sacks
gleefully weaving chaos in its wake

Ugly black insect that screams in delight
each new prize for adversity's sake

Calamity befalls the strong and brave
oblivious to the innocents in its way

 

Determined to control the hearts of men

turning them hard and grey

 

Then in the midst compassion appears

selflessly supportive and drying tears 

 

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  • Desire gold member
    March 29, 2008

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    Thank You!!

    Thank You for Your entry: In The Midst
    This piece tugged at Spirit and the images alone with the strong rhyme~ intriqued my Mind
    Your words weaved a story of Life through Journey within a war where Death hovered
    Powerful message spoken also felt from the Heart

    These lines grabbed and pulled~
    Conflict collects victims in burlap sacks
    gleefully weaving chaos in its wake

    Ugly black insect that screams in delight
    each new prize for adversity's sake
    Fantastic take on the prompt~

    Thank You for sharing Your Heart also Spirit!
    Best wishes to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    **Judging will be done shortly...
    Many blessings too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    March 27, 2008

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    Your last two lines just clinch this hard hitting piece. Very well done. ~Pamela


  • Sarah957
    March 26, 2008

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    This is very dark and sad, I like how in the ending a little light shines amidst all the sadness.
    The strongest image this burned in my mind was the line:
    "Ugly black insect that screams in delight
    each new prize for adversity's sake."



  • SpiritMother
    March 26, 2008

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    This write is awesome, so moving in heart and soul. You pack a punch in every word. Good luck to you!


  • peridotPixi
    March 26, 2008

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    love it

    you probley know by now that im an army wife, this contest is really touching to me. now to your poem, i love the flow and the great word choice you have used,. i love the last lines "then in the midst of compassion appears selflessly supportive and drying tears" this really touches my heart to know that soldiers all bind together to help eachother out when times come to this, good luck in the contest and keep writing, -Amy

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