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The Warmth Beyond

Winter lay across her shoulders
like a dead lover
as she punched
footprints in the snow.

the glow
in the window
called through the
twelve-string wind

and the door shrieked
its protest

  in admittance

      to the soft warmth beyond...

enfolding candlelight

unassuming, benign

clandestine






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Option 4: Candlelight

A contest entry

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  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    Well Done! This is a lovely write, the candlelight flickering in the background lends a romantic air. Good solid writing my Bandit Sister. Congrats on the Gold Trophy. In promoting this Bandit contest I challenged my Bandit family to enter this contest and I said I would give 50 points to anyone who placed above(not an arrogant boast but friendly encouragement). I am sending your 50 points along with my sincere gratitude. Thanks for being the wonderful Bandit that you are.

    Bandits Rock!

    Dennis *song*


  • grannyeri gold member
    April 23, 2008

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    Candle light does hold a kind of soothing quality to it. Enjoyed your interpretation of the candlelight prompt. Congrats on the gold!


  • -LilacThOughts- gold member
    April 22, 2008

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    That wonderful feeling of walking into soothing warmth from a cold winters day, is so comforting to think of, and with the addition of lighted candles and their cosy glow just feels like bliss...thanks for the wonderful imagery and uplifting sense of being safe and sound at the end of the day

    Thank you for this super contribution
    ~Lilac


  • Polaja Greeters member
    April 4, 2008

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    The imagery in this piece is amazing! I really enjoyed the read, the first stanza was my favorite and it just drew me in - wonderful! Good luck in the contest

    Keep writing

    Polly

  • Haiku-bless-you gold member
    March 26, 2008
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    Powerful write with excellent imagery and depth of emotion. Well done my Bandit sister!

    Bandits Rock!

    Dennis


  • moonbumps silver member
    March 26, 2008

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    great read from start to finish babes-fulllypacked with imagery and all sorts of wondrous words-
    Brillsville!
    xxx Hilly


  • annamoy
    March 26, 2008

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    Nice one PP, I love candles especially the scented sort, though my partner hates them. It certainly is a great relief to get into a warm, welcoming house away from the biting wind and snow. I hope you do well in the contest.

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