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Twilight

It all went downhill
When you said those words
They cut my trembling fingers
& killed my stammering heart

How did I get into this
Deadly mess?
How could I be so naive to be
Coaxed by your sweet words?

Reminiscent of the days
When you held me so close
& played with my hair
Between your delicate fingers

But moments like those
Turned out to be viscous lies
That couldn't be concealed long
By your cruel facade


Is this eternal twilight
The emotional holocaust
That is going to drag me down
Into the dark depths of your soul?

Least I know that this is
Soon to be over, because when
The sun finally wins over evil,
And appears over the horizon,
Twilight becomes dawn again,
& I once again have a new beginning

Author notes

Twilight; when the sun is below the horizon esp during the evening
Twilight; an imperfect understanding, a period of decline

We all have these moments, but just let time heal. Please don't leave AP...x

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  • Forgot2Breathe
    July 13, 2008

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    this is so true when your not in love its like an eternal twilight and you explained that beautifully. great job

  • kales4
    June 14, 2008

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    Thank you for entering my contest. This was a very interessting poem. I love the description of "viscous lies" it creates an amazing picture in ones mind. Great write and good luck


  • SummerlandRayne gold member
    June 2, 2008

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    So much emotion poured into this write...thank you for the entry and best of luck in all things!!!


  • Blood Bloom
    June 2, 2008
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    WoW!! You did an amazingly beautiful job. I love the flow of this poem. Purly bravo!


  • Re-invention silver member
    June 1, 2008
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    ~THIS IS AMAZING... i LOVE IT... GOOD LUCK IN THE CONTEST!


  • Logans-Mommy
    April 4, 2008
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    stange ending but i like it.


  • kira1115
    April 1, 2008
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    Great write, I love how you wrote it dark, but not I am going to die, blood and gore dark.


  • faithful-star
    March 26, 2008

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    I know that I love nature poems but another weakness of mine lies in a well written dark poem! I really liked that fact that you were able to combine two of those genres together so wonderfully. I also really liked the fact that you related yourself to the appearing of twilight. Very creative! Good job and good luck in the contest!

    ~Faithful-Star

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