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Quay South

This circling of gulls and dry, raucous cry

Aloft whiting boats and low, dullish sky;

Sailors, fishing, pull writhing, scaly catch

Onto sliding flags from dark, stinking hatch. 

 

A solitary man fronts lashing, driving rain,

Striding against cyclonic storms in vain;

And still wild surgings fling against this wall,

Off-wind part of harbor, cobb's arm and all. 

 

And slowly, sun sinks and moon brings light,

Warm tidal flows lap on quay through night;

Soft music of autumn plays on this wild day;

Storms past, with yachts a-bob on a calm bay.  

 

 

 

 

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Prompt: Twelve lines on any subject but no "e's".

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  • annamoy
    April 2, 2008
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    Well done on getting gold and very well deserved.

    Ann


    • Lyndon gold member
      April 2, 2008
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      Thank you.

      Ann, I take it that you know that it had to be spontaneous yet with no e's.


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    April 2, 2008

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    I am a cynic and, coincidentally, someone with a high opinion of herself and her own poetry. When I don't get a podium place in a contest I raise a Mr-Spock-like eyebrow, and wonder about the judge.

    This time, I saw who had won, and thought "Well, maybe..."

    I clicked on it, and OCH JINGS AW MICHTY! I am not even close to being in the same league! This is brilliant.

    (Heaven, it hurts, lavishing such praise on an Aussie bowler! )

    • Lyndon gold member
      April 2, 2008

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      Mary!

      Fancy meeting you here!
      Actually, I'm a seamer.
      This poem came to me after spending 5 weeks in Britain last year and looking at every jetty, even at Clovelly, possible! Quay South is in Devon. Or was!
      'Twas a braw bricht nacht that nacht, och! Crikey, mate!


  • ukelova
    March 31, 2008

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    Hello there Lyndon!

    You have done well to write so much with out an 'e' in sight. I see you replaced the definite article with 'this'. Very clever.

    I also like the pictures you paint of this stormy sea and then the calm night.

    Good luck in the contest.

    Have an awesome day, ok?
    BJ.






    • Lyndon gold member
      April 2, 2008
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      Thank you, Ukie

      It had been a real experience just 10 months ago.


  • Ogreatbaldone gold member
    March 28, 2008

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    lyndon is the man

    I am very impressed that you could write a poem with no E's with such ease having grown up in newfoundland in a fishing village i can relate to this as well. I was going to try a piece for this contest but after reading yours i will concede the win now. nicely done sir...peace


    • Lyndon gold member
      April 2, 2008
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      Newfoundland...

      Now, you would have many quays there to write about.
      Thank you for your praise. I can take praise at times.


      • Ogreatbaldone gold member
        April 2, 2008
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        my father- newfiepoet3 writes mainly about newfoundland and groeing up there.


      • Ogreatbaldone gold member
        April 2, 2008
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        yes. I have written a few poems about my native land...and the praise was much deserved...peace


  • HaleyMary
    March 26, 2008

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    Beautiful write, Ron. This had a wonderful flow and beautiful imagery. You did a wonderful job on this with using no es throughout the poem. Don't think I could do that.
    Thanks for sharing and best of luck in the contest.


    • Lyndon gold member
      April 2, 2008
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      Strangely

      Having written the poem, going through to eliminate e's was sort of easy, you could say.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    March 26, 2008

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    An excellent achievement and an amazing poem as well.
    Very descriptive and a good flow...very suitable subject matter, not one 'e' present and a sense of calm at the end instead of panic.

    All the best in the contest

    Sue

  • aaaaaaaa
    March 26, 2008

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    wow, this is fantastic! If someone didn't read the prompt they probably wouldn't even notice there weren't e's and still be impressed. Great job.


  • frownsnfreckles
    March 26, 2008
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    I love the imagery and the activity within the poem, it's so full of sound and movement.


  • Pearl-1
    March 26, 2008
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    not one E.. your brill..liked this a lot..good luck in the contest..xxx

  • Rowan gold member
    March 26, 2008

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    I can't believe there was no e, lol, didn't even notice. It flowed perfectly with no hints of constraint. Left me with a feeling of calm. Thanks you.

    Loved this one.
    Kathleen


    • Lyndon gold member
      April 2, 2008
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      Kathleen

      I would even call you 'Kathy' with no e's. Thank you, my friend.


  • annamoy
    March 26, 2008
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    Very well written and a beautifully melodic feel to it. Looks like a winner to me.


  • Lady Altheia
    March 26, 2008

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    It sounds like a hard voyage indeed. This is a great story and the background fits perfectly. Best of luck in your future writing endeavors.


    • Lyndon gold member
      April 2, 2008
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      Serena

      You were the first critiquer for this poem. I do thank you for that! Ron.

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