Stop thinking.
Just do it.
It’s not hard.
It’s in your head.
Just do it.
One little action.
One little move
From one little muscle.
Just do it.
Stop thinking.
It’s just this once.
He wouldn’t give it another thought.
He’d just do it.
Just do it.
No one would care.
You’d be showing them all.
It’s one little pull.
One little twitch.
From one little muscle.
Just do it.
He’s watching you.
Waiting for you.
Why are you hesitating?
Why aren’t you pulling?
He could do it.
Everyone else could do it.
Just do it.
Do it already!
Are you chickening out?
You coward.
Pull it!
He’s waiting for you!
Pull it you woos!
Pull the goddamn trigger!
Just do it!
Do it!
Pull the fucking trigger!
PULL IT!!!
bang
lights out
youre gone
was there too much pressure
you always punk out
this is no exception
you ALWAYS punk out
just too much pressure
youre gone
lights out
thud
Author notes
- In regards to the final stanza, there is a lack of punctuation as I felt it reflective of the piece's overall intent - That without hope or a sense of self-worth or any kind of willpower there is no point in anything really. If you can't live your own life, why should you even bother with simple conventions and rules like grammar or punctuation? Why bother at all?
It's about the death of courage, and the ability to live as an individual.
- Not specifically about a kid with a gun doing a nasty job for some boss.
- 'He' can be interpreted as any kind of 'other' be it a parent or coach or mentor or sibling etc. 'He' could be everyone else you feel is better than you or could do what you feel you cannot.
- In this way the 'pull[ing] [of] the trigger' is the action you feel incapable of doing. It is the barrier between you and your self-esteem which is judged by whether you CAN 'pull the trigger'.
- The title shows how not being able to go through with 'it' - whatever 'it' may be; an action, a thought, a change in your life - leads to self-rejection and potential disaster for the individuals sense of self-worth.
- For those who don't know what a 'woos' is, it is another word for (albeit an improper one) coward, loser, reject, screw-up etc. Needless to say it is derogatory.
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Comments
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Literal, very literal. But still good. I liked your ending and authors notes. Interesting piece!
Thank you for entering and good luck!
Sophie
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This is a powerful write that carries a very strong message. Many people struggle with self esteem issues and what you say here holds a lot of truth. We all want and need to be seen as unique people with our own thoughts and interests. I really like the way you wrote this and the message behind it. Nice job! Blessiings, Patty
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Superb
A very good write, indeed. Excellent imagery and you expressed yourself very well. This reminded me of a poem I wrote many years ago, which is one of four dealing with depression. The title just happens to be "Depression". Here's a link, if you would like to read it. http://allpoetry.com/poem/2194640 -
At first, it sounded suicidal. You had me goin', there! But it is true what you say in the author's notes. Your analogies are very well done!
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