A peaceful time,
At rest in me.
A piece of mind,
That’s best to be
Adrift at sea
Within my thoughts,
A lonesome time,
A gift of sorts.
Alas,
Though freed,
I cannot see,
The things I need
To do and be.
For love has left,
I’m all but gone,
A silent husk,
While life goes on.
And nothing,
But a memory.
A picture left,
To set them free.
A love so strong,
A heart that soars,
A time that’s come,
And left my shores.
For you I pine
In sleep at night.
I scream aloud
In dreadful fright.
Distress that burns.
To you I turn.
A distant light
For which I yearn.
And you alone
Amid the dark,
In memory,
With just a spark,
Will come to me
And calm my heart,
To mend the hurt
Of lovers,
Torn apart.
Author notes
option 3
A contest entry
- Poetry only by Dahlia Tremaine.
425 points, ended April 1, 2008, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - the continuing war between love and hate by Cerbie20.
680 points, ended May 10, 2008, 19 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Make me cry =] [p/w allowed] by LeilaJayne.
500 points, ended May 10, 2008, 28 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Rhyme and Flow part 8 Memories - 50,000 points series by cricketjeff.
4000 points, ended August 23, 2008, 43 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Lovely bouncy rhyming!
Very different in this contest and different is good!
Only one cup per poet so sitting in th efinallists rather than the HMs
Thanks a lot for another terrific entry
Jeff and Sue
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Just a quick comment to say thanks for entering this into my contest, sorry you didnt win but obviously there can only be three trophies given, which is a shame cause in this contest there deserved to be alot more winners! xxx
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Good rhythm and rhyme in this. Thanks for entering! x
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The flow and beat was so very smooth, near flawless. Beautiful poem, absolutely brilliant!
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the beat was awesome. i actually found myself tapping my fingers along with it. the rhyming was pretty good too.
For you I pine
In sleep at night.
I scream aloud
In dreadful fright.
Distress that burns.
To you I turn.
A distant light
For which I yearn
i like these lines the most, because the rhyming was really good, and because i can strongly relate. good job!
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Oh. This is a nice little poem that you have penned in here.
It kind of makes me think of old style poetry where it's more based on a single metaphor that you slow draw out like a story. Lestways, that's how it sounded to me when I read it outloud. I thought it sounded really pretty. You did a good job of expressing yourself here.
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Love yet to arrive will silence the cries. love will ache for love will die for nothing less, great write, P
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well penned script . I see no contest entry for this write, one should enter a few more . i know you are a gifted poet, so the satisfaction is in one self, but u must share some of this talent with others on the site. I see you have managed to keep your writing a secret so far... tis over mate.
cheers
Leif.
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This is so wonderful. I loved the short sentences of this write, it made them so powerful and was effortless to read, it flowed so well. I could feel the pain and heartache seeping from every word. WEll done.
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Once again you have shown me what a unique poet you are, you have taken the age old emotion of heart break and you have made it into something, dare I say, beautiful.
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