She Fell Asleep

Not much left to say
She escaped this world with
no breath left
Even though her pain dissipated
Reality won't let me say, yes
Take her there
She fell asleep, underneath
The darkest silhouettes
If only I could have had that last dance
She fell asleep
Never to wake again

Author notes

option 6 - jungle fever

A contest entry

Options for anyone by brokenangel13. 300 points, ended April 5, 2008, 25 entries
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maralisa
July 31, 2008

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The darkest silhouettes If only I could have had that last dance She fell asleep Never to wake again a very deep and sad poem full of strong imagery and powerful emotions good luck in the contest
movedon
July 29, 2008

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OH BOI!!!!!! The ending is kind of...scary. Lots of strong images in this. I feel like I was there...watching everything unfold. Saddening write.

Warmest,
Mylee
raggyann
April 1, 2008
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IMAGES AND MORE IMAGES THATS WHAT I GOT FROM THIS HEART BREAKER
P. W. Blackwell
March 27, 2008
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wow
i love it the imagery is amazing i really love your writing keep it up
tori
brokenangel13
March 26, 2008
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This poem made my heart ache. it is really good. good luck
RedwingSpirit
March 26, 2008

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Nicely done Very sad though how do you find the words to write so many lol. Good luck with this in the contest.