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Eolian Child

Eolian child,
who tossed in the wind,
for many a year
your wings have been pinned.
Trapped in an enclosure
too small for your size,
to the one who caught you
you're only a prize.
Dreaming of times
back when you were free,
to get back to your zephyr

you'd pay any fee.

 

Eolian child,

as the decades roll by,

eventually you will

forget how to fly.

Live in this cage

and forget your past

it's stale air you'll breathe

until your last.

Author notes

Eolian / Aeolian the spelling for both is correct. But I learned the spelling eolian first.

I wrote this during a darker time in my life, but for some reason, this poem has always kinda stuck with me.



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  • musiccraze2009
    March 24
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    very wonderfully written! you paint a great picture! well done!

  • drifting cloud silver member
    March 10
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    Smooth poetry painting it's picture well.

  • piccola silver member
    March 8

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    this is soooo sad. I know how it feels to be caged and even if you don't have real wings you eventually lose even the taste for freedom. Thanks for the entry it was great.


  • softest-whispers
    March 6
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    Thank you for your entry ~Luce


  • Kazytc silver member
    August 16, 2008
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    Gee this is very moving and enchanting!

    I love this beautiful and enchanting poem, its sort of sings off the page into the mind of the reader.
    Lovely poetic graphics and very well sculpted and woven.
    You sure have a way with words and this is a fabulous piece of poetic perfection and artistry, I hope these are in print? If not they sure should be! Well done bravo love it!
    Poetic Hugs,
    Kaz.
    Kazytc xx

  • piccola silver member
    August 13, 2008
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    Eolian child,

    as the decades roll by,

    eventually you will

    forget how to fly.

    I really like those lines. they call to me for some reason. thank you for the entry


  • Rakerman1
    August 9, 2008
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    A haunting write with beautiful word choices.

    Very well done
    Raker


  • Florida Sunshine
    July 27, 2008

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    First let mention for those who might not understand: eolian is a pretty name ~ but it actually in referrence to sand or rock that is thrown into the wind. ~ I love how you wrote this in the sense you made each piece its own enity/being.

    Very nice job! Thanks for entering the contest ~ it was a pleasure to read your work.

    Best of luck to yyou,
    Florida Sunshine


  • never forgotten
    July 26, 2008

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    Awww this is rather sad
    But on a happier note; I'd love too have you as a cousin if you'd like too be
    Give me a yell back ^^



    Maddie x


  • Never Fall in Love
    July 24, 2008
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    well written, excellent flow


  • wingsofgold25 silver member
    June 3, 2008

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    very well written and I like your choice of words.
    Good rhyming and very good flow.
    Thank you for your entry and good luck in the contest.


  • borrowing.moonlight gold member
    May 28, 2008

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    aww thats pretty i love your flow, you have talent!
    and please check the rules as i asked for everyone to put their username in AN. if you are uncomfortable with this please at least let me know
    well thanks for the entry and good luck


    • TwilightAngel026
      May 28, 2008
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      yeah, sorry I missed that the first time around, and hadn't gotten the chance to fix it yet.


  • Manoj Sanyal
    March 26, 2008

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    well written with good rhyming.
    Best wishes and good luck

  • evelynxxoo
    March 26, 2008
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    i loved the feeling it gives like the wicked witch keeping you traped in the tower

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