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Not Ready

Already scarred at this point
Already burned to a crisp
Already torn, already scattered
Already learned
          My lesson is this...

I've already paid my debt to him!
It's already sealed, my part is done.
My innocence,
          Already scarred at this point

Here's to a battle you've already won.

Your battlefield was already rigged,
My soldiers already drugged by your lie.
My chances,
          Already burned to a crisp

I'm just not quite ready to die.

Author notes

Love burns, dun it? lol random.

Inspired by these lines from No Good Deed:

Fieryo...where are you? Already dead or bleeding...One more disaster I can add to my generous supply?


I'd appreciate comments about punctuation, the world of commas is not nice to me. *hangs head sadly*

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  • liduen silver member
    March 26, 2008

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    This is really good! You should deffinatly enter it in my contest. I lcve the last line. I stink at commas too, no help is coming from m


    • DeadlyTurnip
      March 26, 2008
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      Not...Perfect...ENOUGH!! *mad scientist look* yea, I want a really really really really really really good entry for your contest. Muahaha. I'm glad you like though