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Opposites Attract




She was shy, kind and caring,

usually polite and often sharing.
He was loud, mean and unkind,

rarely polite and insulting the blind.

She was sincere, honest and true,

who helped others out when they were blue.
He was fake, a liar and untrue,

who'd gobble people up by the time he was through.

She was helpful, trusting and always there,

her heart lead her to love and care.

He was awkward, untrusting and avoiding,

you had to watch his temper exploding.

She loved him for standing out,

he loved her as she'd never shout.

She wanted him to protect her heart,

he wanted her to give him a new start.

She protected him as he was misunderstood,

he protected her from all that he could.

She adored him for being by her side each night,

he adored her by the way she made things right.

She knew he could be bad, but never to her.

He knew she could flirt, but she wasn't a whore.

She knew he could be violent, but he never raised a hand,

he knew she could be manipulative, but he was her man.

She protected him from aligations whether false or true,

he protected her from men doing to her what they'd usually do.

She kept his secrets of bad things he used to do and say,

he kept her secrets of the bad times once upon a day.

She thought it was forever and never would it end,

because he wasn't just a lover, but also he was a friend.

She believed he was sincere, that nothing would go wrong,

he was her support forever, always keeping her strong.

He thought it was forever and never would he leave,

because he couldn't hurt her, nor to her could he deceive.

He believed she could save him like he really needed,

oh and to his heart, she nearly had suceeded.

But then one day she cried so hard,

but then one day he broke her heart.

He said it had to be over for a while,

she had beauty wiped off her smile.

Then rumours came that he was being mean,

then rumours came that he'd never been -

in love and she cried almost every night,

holding her pillow and weeping out of sight.

He done some things after that made her cry,

he said some things that made her want to die.

She said she hated him but he knew it was a lie,

he said the words that she hated, goodbye.

Then saying he loved her in messages he'd send,

he ultimately suggested that it hadn't been an end.

Then not long after he said he didn't love her anymore,

maybe not even ever she thought, like she had before.

She was kind and caring and so naive,

she didn't know that he intended to decieve.

He was so kind to her how could she tell,

or believe what her friends said, picking up the warning bell?

So she is now bitter, insincere and unkind,

she now mocks herself and bullies the blind.

Now he may be laughing and happy in his stride,

but she knows the secrets he has come to hide.

Author notes

This is the story of Karl & I.
Opposites do attract, but often kill.

Don't insult.
or go away if you want to.

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  • Coathanger
    August 1
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    Do opposites really attract..or is life far more random than a very random thing? Well written.


  • Sue Cardwell gold member
    March 21

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    Thank you for your entry in the contest.An interesting poem about opposites attracting and the eventual outcome of their tale. Congratulations on the trophies already won.

    All the best in the contest.

    Sue and Jeff


  • Heroesrox
    March 6

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    Awesome and suspensful piece! Thanks so much for a wondeful share! Congrats on the trophie sthat it already got you and maybe you'll win anothe rin this contest! Good luck!


  • August Starlight silver member
    January 26

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    I LOVE IT!
    It's so suspensful, yet relateable.
    This sounds like my previous relationship, in a way.
    And I love the way you've ended this as well.
    Thanks for entering!


  • charmander13
    September 2, 2008

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    Ohmygod, I love your poem-it is brilliant, poetic, and utterly gut-wrenching. Brilliant


  • TechnicolorDreams
    September 1, 2008

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    Absolutely Amazing.

    Love is blind. Opposites do attract, and unfortunately conflict as well. This poem is so sad. You told a story within this poem. It showed personality. I love it Thank you so much for entering my contest!


  • karas
    September 1, 2008
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    My kind of poem girl. 3 applaud


  • Cerbie20
    August 12, 2008
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    i am not going to insult this poem at all, because this poem is exactly like my last relationship. i was nice, he was mean, yet i thought i was in love. i realize now that i wasnt because i have always been in love with someone else. but i do really feel your pain. this was really good.


  • edit my world.
    July 6, 2008

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    isnt that lovely...when opposites attract that is...but it always seems to screw one of the people over as you've shown before...the emotion behind this is strong and beautiful

    thanks so much for entering love and good luck

    ♥Toxic


  • bangbaby
    April 15, 2008

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    oh my dear this is just amazing!
    i can so relate.
    my bf and i are pretty much like this.
    well use to be. things change but none the less
    i love this poem much thanks for shareing.


  • Cat10
    April 14, 2008

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    a great poem! expressive and a wonderful flow and rhyme!! my goodness it captured me into the story with the first word and I never lost interest! I was hung onto every word! wonderful write! and best of luck in all of your contests!


  • Shassidy
    April 6, 2008

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    Wow. This is a great poem! It has that "he said/she said" feel to it and it really works for this poem. Also, the rhyming flows really well and there is a lot of wonderful imagery. I love how the story fits into the poem really well and it flows wonderfully. I like how you started out with the character traits and then in the end showed how those character traits could change because of a situation or a person. The title reflects the poem well, but it is clichéd as well, so I think a more inventive title would be better. But overall, I really enjoyed this poem. Great job and good luck in the contest!


  • XxbloodredromancexX
    March 29, 2008
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    simply speechless


  • Kiss the girl--x
    March 27, 2008

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    Sweetie, this was amazing, esp with the rhyme. I fail at rhyme lol

    Things will get better with time, we just have to wait for the right moment i guess [=


  • dragonzbloodxgirl
    March 26, 2008

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    This is really good, i dont know u really but i am sure u a really kind person. i am sure u are sweet
    ♥Brittany♥


  • Rose Dark Thorn silver member
    March 25, 2008

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    You're beautiful. You're nowhere near unkind, or insincere, or any such things. You're a sweetheart.


  • scream.n2.nite
    March 25, 2008

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    misunderstood

    This was PERFECT!! I loved it!! Wow, thank you for posting this into my contest ma deary!! I really liked these two lines:

    "She thought it was forever and never would it end,
    because he wasn't just a lover, but also he was a friend."


    Again I wanna tell ya how much I loved this amazing write!! It was quite long, but I barely even noticed for you captivated my attention all the way through it!! Great job and good luck!! Thank yooooooooooou!!

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