I only feel
the way you do
because thats all i think
the way you move
the things you do
the every breath you take
my mind keeps moving
inside your wake
following you to your home
you the one who keeps me awake
the reason I'm not alone
A contest entry
- let's be fake by Annexed Josephine.
800 points, ended April 10, 2008, 12 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - . by Aurora Ceres.
475 points, ended April 5, 2008, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
What do you think in general? Improvements?
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alright cult follower
this is dramatic and well done. short but very sweet and to me- a level of sarcasm in you tone is what does it for me. just go with it hahha -
Very poignant and a good read. Happy trails
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there is love in the crazy world for all of us if we look hard enough - loneliness can be a killer so it is nice to have someone
a good poem.
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Normally I could not find a way to ever say this, but in this light, I can understand why the stalker feels the way he does. I can sympathize with him. No one wants to be or feel alone. And everyone will do the best they can to hold onto whatever it is that they think will keep them from feeling alone.
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hey! let's stalk the victim too! nice work.
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