The body’s a mirror to the mind
Wrists shredded
Heart headed
To disaster.
The bulges point to
Binges point to
Overindulgence! At 107
Heretic, rebel
Hates herself
Loves her ribcage
~everything to the extreme~
Eyeliner
Miniskirts
Purges and
~breakdowns~
A contest entry
- An outside view of youth by Suicide Hotline.
525 points, ended June 12, 2008, 15 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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This is very simple but has a lot of meaning, the only thing that i would watch out for is that you eather have to pick weather you want the girl herself to shine in the poem or the feelings, if you understand what i mean. But their was a fair balance, thanks for the entery.
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Wow, wha a great poem! I love how you have expressed the way the girl feels. My favourit part was definatley the powerful ending:
'~everything to the extreme~
Eyeliner
Miniskirts
Purges and
~breakdowns~ '
You couldn't have produced a more powerful way to finish it up then that.
Great Write
Laura.
Check out my poem 'Just give me water'
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i like...the bulges point to binges point to. overindulgence! thats my favorite. the rest is alright.
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speachless
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Wow
That was something. I like how it actually describes a broken girl...
Makes me feel sad that people are out there and doing that.
I hope you aren't. Cause then I'll have to hug you and make it all better. :] -
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ehh... afraid so, or at least I have. I still have an eating disorder; trying to get rid of it though, and I don't act on it anymore. I don't starve myself, don't weigh 107 anymore either.
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