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Perfection

Peaceful diamond sands
under my scalded scarlet toes
during the sunset

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Traditional Haiku

A contest entry

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  • Crazy9Piano8Freak
    May 6, 2008
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    That is what I call perfect! lol great job!

  • Kari gold member
    March 31, 2008
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    Awesome job with this haiku..that is perfection indeed!!!


  • Kelli Marie
    March 25, 2008

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    I can definitely see the picture in this piece. Nicely written. Good luck to you in the contest. Great job.
    Kelli


  • sheltered
    March 25, 2008
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    Spiced hot with alliteration. Nice.