Beneath radiant beams of light
I stood erect, proud until
impaled by fatal mayhem
masquerading behind piety.
On my shoulders pride
the existence of life, love, peace.
Listen hear the echo's of freedom
calling each of our names.
I shall not let your hearts change
with me so many souls rest.
Windblown shambles; I am no more!
Remaining a precious memory.
After the dust, after the clamor
gone but I shall never be forgotten.
Astonishing symbol of world affairs
empty oaken hands; I reach out
forever to you...
Author notes
Ennovy - prompt: #9 symbol - Dalaney
A contest entry
- A Duel of Poets (1) Invite only! by Beating.
450 points, ended April 12, 2008, 13 entries
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That last stanza blew me away! This piece is just stunning, and it really made my thoughts wonder! It's almost as if you pose all these different picture ideas, and just let the reader go with it. I can't explain it. It truly is amazing!
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The secret life of trees?
An old oak biting the dust from man's steel. The tree of life or the great tree of myth. Speaking in his language of man's lives and loves, his spirit sees deeply. I;m guessing at the meaning. What is the perspective? Thank you for the read.
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Tons of sybolism here, one could almost make anything they wanted of it [and perhaps, it is intended that way]. As I read it, it seems to me you were talking about the sweet dove of peace "impaled by fatal mayhem", her tree branch blown from beneath her "empty oaken hands; I reach out". One thing for sure, there isn't any peace anymore...shall we resurrect the dove again?
Aquene, Brazos
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Good One
Hope in the middle of "windblown shambles". An interesting poem you've penned here.
Good luck in this contest.
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Enchanting!
The mood of this piece is mystical in
that it captures a spirit of hope during
times of distress and sadness.
We all lay on the balance of life
as helpless pilgrims seeking the best
that it has to offer.
Sometimes at our lowest moment in time
someone or something lifts us to a place
of peace and harmony. Nicely done
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I'm not really sure what to say about this poem. It is really beautiful and touching but I don't really understand it. I would change nothing about it and the tittle fits it perfectly. Very good work.
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Very,very good write. It is just the big words that I need to brush up on.
Emma
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This was so stunning!! I think you did the most incredible job using the prompt you were given. I can not fathom that you will lose this round my friend (even though you are up against a tough one).... You words were just beautiful!!!
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