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I Miss

I miss you when we use to talk,
I miss it when we had our walks,

I miss the morning sun that shined,
When everything seemed so kind,

I wish now that the sun would go,
Depressed as ever, missing you so,

I hate the days, I do not care,
Its another day that you aren't there,

Sunrise, Sunset, I always cry,
Hoping this will be the day I die.

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I Miss My Dad, Vicki, & Meg
CATEGORY THREE
Written December 6th, 2003

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  • SEA angel gold member
    December 6, 2003
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    Excellent

    Me too. I miss mom and dad and grandmother and...
    I miss walking in Mall with mom and having a salad and iced tea at a Mall sidewalk cafe type bistro. I would like to go riding horses with dad. I'd like to have spent Thanksgiving at Grandmother's with mom and dad there. Yes, like you, "I Miss"... Thank God for my cyber walks and friends and two "sistas" and one WGCD where my fingers do the walking and talking. I'll see you next stanza or IM Sara. Sorry I missed you as I specifically stopped by to say "HI WGCD". I wish a few somebodies missed me... I still have a couple of dreams up my sleeve but I have my days just like you... I'm leaving a box of cyber Kleenex and a hug. angel

  • SternBlinkin
    December 6, 2003
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    I miss too. It's hard to deal with the passing of a love one. I think that way too every now and then, but there is also so much to live for too. "fall afar"~'the choice is mine not yours' you might like tha tpoem if you havn't read it.
    I love you

    you'll be okay
    loves
    *Jessica*


  • Bluestar
    December 6, 2003
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    A beautiful write, I am so sure that Vikki is very proud of you, and is with you wherever you go. I hope that you are OK, I have no idea of the pain that you are going through - but I'm always here for you if you ever want to talk

    Blue


  • December 6, 2003
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    Another wonderfully written, but oh so sad write. I feel so badly for both you and your brother. It is such a tragic loss for you both. I wish you the best of luck in the contest honey.

    Much love to ya!!
    ~~Mary Anne~~


  • haikumonk gold member
    December 6, 2003
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    Best of luck in the contest. Well written, sad poem.


  • Sara Bellem
    December 6, 2003
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    She was the bestest friend I ever had, She was my sister, She was going to marry my brother once he was out of military college & when she was out of H.S but this would never be so. I miss her because we did everything together. ---Sara


  • December 6, 2003
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    This is very sad, dyingrose.....it is understandable you miss vicki...was she more than a friend? A great poem. I really love the way you write, and the format of your poems. Keep writing.

    xxx mistry (anti-pink ) xxx


  • blkwidowsd
    December 6, 2003
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    AWESOME!!!!!!!!

    Ohhhhh myyyy
    This is beautiful!!!!!!
    Lonliness, the hurt,
    I can feel it through every line....
    Great write
    Thank you for your entries
    Good Luck
    Best Wishes
    ~Tracey~

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