Jungle and night, those stars
Up my amber eyes
Up my burning gaze
Up my heart beat
The cleansing pulse, and hunt
Which keeps no balance between
Here or there, nor you and I.
Cracked earth, that black sky
Volcanic soil -- My paw print
Lap water at the brook, our cold tongue
Bloody whiskers, canines, ivory -
- Long beautiful smile, reflections...
When I see our face watered up at me
I lowest growl pheromones, a strong musk.
We are upside down and tigers
Day sleepers
Down my full stomach
Down my need to kill
Until tonight when
We'll tiger still.
Author notes
A poem about the duality between a mother and son.
Written December 6th, 2003
In a list
A contest entry
- Mirror Mirror On The Wall by Darc Soul.
300 points, ended September 3, 2006, 29 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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talk about ignorant. I have an hp pavilion mx703. furthermore, I have sent no more messages than you. why do you think you're the only who has a right to reply to messages?
where is my poor grammar, anyway? as far as GPA, I don't know where you got your info, but Bush got C's in college. maybe his scale was a 5.0 one, not a 4.0 one.
again, you really need to go into therapy. if you're as great as you claim, why do you feel the need to tell everyone how inferior they are? -
funny, I've never heard of an illiterate person with a 3.8 GPA in college.
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I'm not the one telling people they can't write as if I am some poetry god.
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I'm sorry about your issues. You really should see a therapist. I know you have an AP "police file" that's almost as large as your ego. And that's because you feel the need to insult others so you can feel better about yourself. That's actually very sad. Enjoy yourself, if this is the only way to do so. But I have a feeling you aren't in actuality. Only a miserable person would resort to your smallness.
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Hmmm, how do you know I'm not a poet? How can you just assume that I write rhyming-daisy or gothic-cutting poems? What's the definition of a poet anyway (oh and check up jocko on the way too please)? Too lazy to check them up in a dictionary sorry. I'm just a lowlife. And your example of the hobbiest of medicine is not rational in this case. I believe you're comparing the operating room to AP, or something the sort? AP is for everyone. Thus, it isn't only the professional "poets" who are allowed to post their poetry. Though if you were to say that most of APs members write shite, I'd agree. I'm part of them. But AP doesn't belong to you, and we're not walking into your operating room. I'd understand if I'd walk into the room or place where you write. But see, I'm allowed to breathe and I'm allowed to write without being reminded every second that I should quit and that I'll never go anywhere with that. And the fact that you've published a book, that you're selling albums of your music and that you think you're so hot doesn't make me inferior to you. As a matter of fact, Tina (Ava Noire on here) is a billion times more talented than you are (in my opinion) and she's only published a chapbook, yet. And I'm pretty sure Plath wrote better poems at 10 than you are right now. Oh and I understand all that family-feeding thing. But I still don't see how that makes having poetry as a hobby wrong. As far as I'm concerned, it's not a sin. Not nearly as close a sin as being so blatantly self-loving. It's pitiful really. I think you're a hopeless case.
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I see. Well ok. Not used to this sort of poem with invented verbs and all these. So I can't really say I don't like it but... yeah pretty much. I don't like it. But to be honest, I'm incompetent poetry-wise so you probably think you know more than me, and you'd think that even if I hadn't told you this. Oh and you're very special indeed. Wow, a book eh? Olympically special that is. Well very good for you. Though I don't see what's wrong with writing poetry as a hobby and not wanting to flaunt it around as if it were a 12-inch dick. I love your pompous attitude.
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lol. I haven't attempted to publish a book. poetry is one of my hobbies. I'm doing something more worthwhile with my life by being a pre-med student... something much more worthwhile than being an insulting, self-centered, self-important jerk like yourself.
besides, many people have published books. that in and of itself doesn't mean much these days.
why would you care to impress someone who can't write, anyway?
and why would you want your poetry (or whatever it is) to be judged by someone who can't write?
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well that must make it so. eh?
I don't really like your writing too much, so we're even. -
You can't.
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I remember you; you said I coudn't write!
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great work. this is an awsome poem. i love how differant and uniqe it is from others i have read. thank you for entering my contest.
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Hi there friend,
I was thinking of my son as I re-read this. It sure is hard to be a mother to a son...you love them with all you have and it's so terribly hard to cut the umbilical cord the second time. Even though you disagree at every turn, the love softens the pain and you always find a way to work through. Another of your amazing writes.
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hmm ive been very intrigued by poems that are "abstract" in fact i just wrote one called Meanings meant and no one understands it. lol so i know you pain.. i have my own interpretation of this but like many i think its good and good luck in my contest
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This was one awesome poem. Thank you for entering it!
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This is very cool. Like a double personality or an alternate one anyway. Finding that animal within oneself and letting the experience sweep you away. I like this poem muchly but I don't feel like going over the form and all that nonsense right now. It's perfect just as it is.
~Bezoar -
Your high standards are shit.
You have the standards of a teenage
Bottle of acne medication, goths suck. -
It's a poem about my mother.
We're both tigers, although
she's a monkey. I look forward
to reading your poem, your
presense here is highly regarded,
and I wish you luck. But you're a
great writer, you should do well
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great imagery. kind of a sex and water thing. fearful symmetry. I always like nouns dressed up as verbs.
applause, two-purposed
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I'm not sure I entirely understood this poem (hehehe, quite a few people have said as much, it would appear) but I like your descriptions and the abstract-ish imagery. I also quite like how you turn 'tiger' into a verb in the last line
Nice write.
Cheers,
~Tal~ -
SORRY
maybe next time.
Your poem was great but... It didn't quite make it's way up to my high standards.
Sorry.
BUT I ENJOYED READING.
KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!!
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ooooooooooooooooooook!!!!
Now I have to go do one of the most boring things in the world. Not that everyone’s poems in this contest are boring, but only about half of you followed the rules. I even sent messages to those with the “RULE problem” and they still haven’t changed it. I have both posted a message on their poem and on their site as well. OH well.
So yes, now I’m going to do the judging…right now…at… 6:42am!
LoL
All judging will be finished by November 10 at the very latest.
I will be sure to post a comment to every one saying whether you won or not.
GOOD LUCK EVERYONE!
All though you don’t need it.
NEKO
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I loved how your word choice painted a picture in my mind.Great write,keep up the good work!
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hmm... interesting peice. i didnt really understand it but the flow was great and so was the imagry. i agree with Magdalena, the part about the reflection is awesome. thanks for entering my contest and good luck! take care.
alwaz~BB -
It was a nice piece I likd the relfection of the tigers that's ym favorite part but some of the wording was hard for me to comprehend I'm not putting a damper on it I liked it and thanks for entering
Chao -
We are upside down and tigers
Day sleepers
Down my full stomach
Down my need to kill
until tonight when
we'll tiger still.
great poem, i am not entirely in the know here but i just loved the flow and the images that u pulled in and drew out. very tasy piece -
I like tigers: meow!!!
"here and there or you and I." should read 'NOR you and I.'
strange collection of words that at first I cant seem to get a full grasp of... but I will continue to re-read it and hopefully The true meaning of this write will come to me.....failing that expect an IM...
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