I'm a girl
that's unpolished
yet a girl
of my rank
I'm a girl
shunned by all
even by
herself
I'm a girl
of much pain
but as yet
I'm still unbeaten
I'm a girl
seen by all
yet never touched
by love
Until you came...
Your eyes were not deceived
by the injustice,
the prejudice
You ears could hear
my song,
though not at first
But now despair
seeps through
my sorry hide
Tears prickle in
my reddish eyes
Creeping, crawling
down my cheeks,
down my chin
For I-
I could not
save you-
My life
My love
MY LOST
A contest entry
- "Wicked" Lyrics Inspired! by liduen.
600 points, ended April 12, 2008, 16 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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You're a polished poet. It gets to the point with a definitive 'march', and the tone is one of those that the reader can't help but be affected by.
I like the 'flow' of the second-last stanza (really).
The closing is filled with despair, yet it's like a steel trap. With all its strength.
Mordegast
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This is really sad. I like the whole thing but especially the part where you say "For I-I could not save you- My life My love MY LOST" You really portray a good point when you say "Your eyes were not deceived
by the injustice, the prejudice" because it's really a big issue in our world today. Great job!
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Yeah you entered!! *dances* Anyways, great poem and great interpretation (gah, i cant spell) of the song. I like the last stanza a lot. Great job and good luck in the contest
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