petals flow red
secrets from your mind
while with anticipation
my eagerness braves mind’s war
and your silence
within corolla’s bloom
gorge thorns into brittle soul
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A contest entry
- PIF PROMPT CONTEST by penman.
525 points, ended March 25, 2008, 8 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Invite only contest. by penman.
525 points, ended March 26, 2008, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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Congrats on your bronze - wonderful descriptive piece
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Excellent flow of verse--Well Done!
Congratulations on the Bronze!
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The texturedness in this poem ...
and the contrast between petals and thorns and between the emotionally linked alliterative words secrets and silence and braves and brittle, let me zoom in on the mind's war ... And I can but say: there is a thesis to be written about this concise poem! How intriguingly well you do prompts, Poet! Such layeredness.
Good luck in the contest -- you should do well.
Hoop jy het 'n wonderlike dag!
Myra
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Wonderful
Very well done. best of luck in the contest.
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You have penned some powerful imagery in a few short words. Not an easy task but you have done it quite well!!!! Bravo!!! Excellent write as always. Take care, Sandy
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