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Spiritus...


I am parched ground
mute beneath withering glare
bone bare without complaint
to drying winds;

having made myself, where
would I find a tear. I send

scents of wanting
into sudden windless skies
and lift my thoughts into emptiness
the kind gift of my maker;
and faith fills a universe.

Transfigured into footsteps
pacing after my shadows
where sun and moon compete
for my heart; a mansion
of many chambers closes doors behind me.

Fled into rooms of remorse
anger upon imperfect soul,
dry skin holding heat
and eyes filled in want,

found rooms of cleansing
wished for place of prayer
dwelled at longest midnight hour
in sins of memory, by eyes
blinded to pain of others.

Then in rooms of silence
found quiet tenderness
there within my spirit
where truth cannot be hidden,
in softest light and every word
clear as rain,
given to lasting promise; water

fallen as dew
upon face of a silken rose, washing
over folds of time, until
spirit found this precious flower;

knowing that only love would remain
upon face of burning sun,
I opened a window and
waited for dawn.


 

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  • I am smitten once again by the insight into truth in your soft, bold words. You begin with such dry, desolate breathing and progress through a journey of introspection and renewal that lead to rivers of living water, the mist of which, when inhaled deeply, brings the only sure refreshing.

    I love the truth that "emptiness" is often the "kind gift of [our] maker." THAT knowledge is the fruit of mature perspective--one of choosing responsibility rather than blame, and choosing a wisdom higher than our own. It is becoming comfortable with discomfort because you know it is for the best. Being content in all things. Something I endeavor to live by.

    The level of self awareness and honest, brutal soul searching within these lines is so beautiful, and i love the progression through the rooms of remorse, cleansing, and finally to peace.

    There are two ways I can read the ending, and I am curious as to your meaning, or if the duplicity is intentional. You say, "only love will remain upon face of burning sun. I open a window and wait for dawn."

    Do you mean to say that the love, (like the water on the flower) can withstand the scorching sun? Thus, having been refreshed and now accompanied by love, you can face the dawn without fear of thirst? Or do you mean to say that because there is value in the scorching, that the love of the maker can be found in the burning heat, that you welcome it by opening the window? Perhaps you mean neither! Either way, or neither, I thought it was beautiful.

    This is one of my favorite pieces of yours. I feel truly blessed to have read it.


  • Just Rob gold member
    April 16

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    wonderful

    RICH METAPHOR

    I love the, er, wholesomeness of the search, the hunger. And the ending is perfect, unresolved, but somehow peaceful, as if another day, itself, is magic enough.

    Good stuff!

  • ecrivain01 silver member
    April 7
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    Very nice ...

    and very nicely done.


  • RuthKephart
    March 25
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    Simply stunning
    Ruth


  • Lord Gegishov silver member
    March 25

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    Wow! This is exceptional. The last stanza really stands out for me:

    knowing that only love would remain
    upon face of burning sun,
    I opened a window and
    waited for dawn.

    Sometimes waiting for morning is the best solution to our troubles.

  • FransB silver member
    March 25

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    I wanted to close down for the night, but got side tracked. This poem one cannot ignore. There is a sadness and yet deep dynamic of movement as one moves from one room to another. Not only are the words beautiful, the style magic. The flow speeds was one read to the end. Then there is a pause, as the window is opened and dawn is awaited. This is truly a refreshing read and I am joyed to have stopped over. This is a winner. Frans


  • poetryality silver member
    March 25

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    Breathtakingly Beautiful! Oh my! Do I ever love the sense of soul-searching and finding the solace needed to move past the vile offerings of everyday existence sometimes. Splendid work! Trophy worthy for sure. I wish you the very best in the challenge. I feel a bit refreshed and I am glad my spirit was led to feast on these words.


    Much Love Always ♥

    Renee


  • Thanatos
    March 25
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    This is epic. This is absolutely epic.

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