If infinity collided with yesterday’s memory,
would it provide tomorrow’s dream?
Sinking into timeless eternity
whilst gazing into your eyes.
In a list
A contest entry
- 20 Words by Perfectly Imperfect.
450 points, ended March 30, 2008, 39 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Short pieces - Prewrites Allowed. Bring the good stuff! by Amunet Wolfbane.
1000 points, ended April 1, 2008, 58 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Enter All Your Personal Writes Here (Part IV) by xxRainbowDawnxx.
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Please tell me what you think
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well put, very strong and concise for just 4 lines but I like where you took this, makes me really think.
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Hmm, a good question. I do like this piece, it has a romantic quality which is good. I do think if you separated the lines in the middle it would give the mind a moment to pause and the last lines would have a bit more impact. But it is a pretty poem.
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Thank you very much. I was thinking about putting in a seperation, upon re-reading it, it would work better.
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This is great, I love the questioning in the first lines Great expression. Well done and thank you for entering x
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Thank you very much. I was hoping the questioning made sense, wasn't sure it did when I was writing it.
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A beautiful verse, full of wonder. Love the first 3 lines, awe inspiring. Superbly penned, all the best in your contest
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Thank you very much. As I have said elsewhere, I am enjoying working with short, word-limited prompts at the moment.
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