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Eden

 

Two round pegs on a square-peg world
Went sailing on the sea
We got the Genoa unfurled
Trekked downwind peacefully

We had martinis on the deck
The trip was such a ball
The dark cloud that was once a speck
Became a sudden squall

A rock, a wind, a nasty wave
The boat now has a hole
The rudder now will not behave
Along the waves we roll

Awakened on a sandy beach
A kiss upon my cheek
Is paradise within my reach?
I open eyes to peek

A bountiful, natural place
Where fruit and fish are ample
With food, abundant, we say grace
And eat a healthy sample

We dry ourselves beside the fire
The moon rises above
The breeze is thick with our desire
The stars twinkle with love

As twilight ends we made our bed
There high upon the shore
Then when the morning came we said
We want to leave no more

The calmness of the water frames
The colorful sunrise
A thousand times that beauty flames
Within her gorgeous eyes

We lost all track of days and nights
And smiled most all the time
Ate berries and took in the sights
Drank coconut and lime

She draws me pictures in the sand
I weave her skirts of vine
We dance by moonlight hand in hand
And all the world is fine

And when upon horizon’s line
Another boat will show
We use branches to cover mine
And hide until they go

Two round pegs on an island give
Each other so much bliss
I will not any ending give
A story such as this

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

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  • RuthKephart
    April 4, 2008
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    Just back for another look


  • Pamela A Lamppa silver member
    March 28, 2008

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    oooooh A delightful tale. Just lovely. Wonderful rhyme and rhythm in this piece. Good luck in this contest. ~Pamela


  • Bazza
    March 26, 2008

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    Tell me where !!!!

    A wonderful tale and brilliantly written with a happy and quick pace that made compelling reading Loved it mate.
    Bazza


  • kiwigirljacks gold member
    March 26, 2008

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    Aww.. what a lovely time that would be!! Took me away on a little trip! So beautiful! And you are a master at rhyme!


  • Amera gold member
    March 25, 2008

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    This is beautiful in imagery and passion. Lane is right in her comment. Your poems read like lovely songs and this one is no exception.

    Love,
    Amera♥


  • HaleyMary
    March 25, 2008

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    This was beautiful. Wonderful flow and very passionate. Like, two people spending time together. I liked the part of the stars twinkling with love. Almost like a love can seem to be written in the stars. Keep that pen flowing and good luck in the contest.


  • RuthKephart
    March 25, 2008

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    As I was reading this I was thinking what a beautiful compliment to another of the poems in the contest but I see you two already know each other Anyway, lovely meter and rhyme and together or alone this poem stands and stands well. Yu've painted a tranquil paradise for all of us here. Thank you for your entry and best wishes in the contest


  • cricketjeff gold member
    March 25, 2008
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    Brilliant shadow!


    • PerVirtuous
      March 25, 2008
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      You mean it doesn't stand on it's own? Awwww....

      Conceived at the same time, so truly a twin.


  • Dalaney gold member
    March 25, 2008
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    and no two pegs could be happier...

    Love, Lane

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