Running, the sound of feet pounding
rustling through the grassy meadow.
Crying, stumbling toward the shade,
the shade of the lumbering oak tree.
Right behind, calling to find the crier,
the worry lines showing,
spotting the outline hugging the trunk
sprinting forward to comfort.
Coming closer, the crier circles the tree,
trying not to be seen.
The comforter reaches out, grabbing a hand
and pull the crier close.
They lay down together,
the comforter holding the shaking friend,
Rubbing the criers back,
as silent tears roll down the comforters face.
Author notes
5)Friendship is a sheltering tree. by Samuel Coleridge
A contest entry
- Inspired by you for poets 16 and younger by Starz of Heaven.
1750 points, ended June 5, 2008, 11 entries
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What do you think? How can I improve? What was your least favorite part? Your favorite?
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comforting and nice poem you crafted. people would be lucky enough to be comforted. nice write. thank you for sharing and good luck in the contest.
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so pretty
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Awesome. I luv the second to last stanza. Great write.
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Great write and great comfort to.. Best to you in the contest.
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Very well written! I like this poem. Everyone can use a comforter at some point in their life. I have no favourite or least favourite part. There should be no improvments. It was written very well! Good luck in your contest!
Emma
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This is a very nice piece that you have done here I love this quote and I love the way that it inspired you thank you for your entry into my contest be well
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