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Tuesday's talking about doors, coffee and revelations

 

 

 



Come sit awhile
stir the cup of wealth
arabica roast in hands

the kitchen door opens
coffee bubbles up

words spool like cotton
reels of smiles
subtle sounds do not fool me
this cup is half full


and the miles of sheets
untangle

woke to find the
" The Rose of Sebastopol"
on my brow
glasses askew
tried to read till the end

in my mind's eye
I saw blood and guts,
nurses in white linen
and robes ravaged by gunshot and fire

I have seen this-

worn death like a shroud
held hands of the dying
and the living

to make well

all worthwhile

on release of doors and hinges
now untied by nothing more than a name

sprung out a beginning

of something
told as a story now

to you
Tuesdays deliver newspapers
tobacco 
a hot cup of tea
maybe

hot buttered toast
poached eggs

the mither of having
to decide
which comes first
the Post Office
or the Supermarket

 

 

 

 

 

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  • Wandika gold member
    March 27, 2008

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    Wonderful!

    Like this one Gil. Another good chapter beginning.

    It does sound loney and bored at the same time. Maybe vacation time. Where would you go? "prompt"

    Jim


  • Lavender Butterfly silver member
    March 27, 2008

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    Oh wow ~ what can I say. This is just wonderful. Such a well deserved win. Congratulations. Just superb. Many blessings, Lavender Butterfly.


  • catz Moderators member
    March 27, 2008
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    Tnis is superb, Gill and entirely worthy of the Gold trophy. Your poetry always amazes me with its depth, its underlying nuances.

    You weave your story without 'telling' it but with the naturalness of feeling what's happening.

    Good job

    Dee


  • layla.
    March 26, 2008
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    i am just speechless by your by narrative style. yet you never to "tell"... "i did this and you did that"> NEVER! thanks for giving one of your originals[well you would never give me anything else"
    the ending was so perfect and balanced... it leaves an impact. this is a kind of poem that stays in mind.


  • ArtFullyMe gold member
    March 26, 2008

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    The end almost seems like a twist, coming off the depth of the previous stanzas with the commonness of the choice, giving all before it a rather satirical feel.

    Or if not satirical then perhaps, a strange sort of acceptance.

    Day after day, the big things, small things, life, if you stand back far enough, it all starts to look the same..



  • Randomly Beautiful
    March 25, 2008

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    subtle sounds do not fool me
    this cup is half full


    I love this piece.

  • Yvette Champ gold member
    March 25, 2008

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    The Poetess weaves philosophy, experience, imagery and emotion with such ease that the reader feels as if she herself is holding the half empty, as opposed the half full cup of coffee at the same table. Loved the ordinariness woven within having to address the depth of death, yes sadly it's too true, whilst we grieve and feel that what is there that matters more the very mundane things have to be done and even sadder is the ease that most of talking about the munade rather than those things that matter the most.Also liked the usage of mithering, reminded me of a Northerner I knew who used to say stop mithering, stop being nowty, why don't you have mushy peas in your chip shops and asked for a Northern ale in a posh nightclub in the South, I digress and ramble, as usual, Bravo this Tuesday talked to me.


  • Nicolette gold member
    March 25, 2008

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    woke to find the
    " The Rose of Sebastopol"
    on my brow -

    Oh that one I know too, lolol - you brought a smile to my face with this Tuesday story, Gilly.

    This is great writing - just love these day poems of yours. Keep them coming!! The poem also reminds me of what we've talked about yesterday - about the things we've seen and carry around in our head. The difference is that you can make poetry of it.

    ~ Nicolette


    • NurseChilly gold member
      March 25, 2008
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      yes- this poem congealed itself from several of yesterday's conversations...

      all good and all worthwhile ... and meaningful

  • tara wilson gold member
    March 25, 2008

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    I am going to say the same as Suzanne..how do you keep up writing with all the days of the week? My, goodness you are busy..this is brilliant...I love the lines Kathleen quoted, too, excellent...the ending sounds like my Tuesday..day off today..and somewhere between the supermarket and mail, I hope there's a poem..lol.

  • Rowan gold member
    March 25, 2008

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    wow. Powerful.
    Loved this;
    "on release of doors and hinges
    now untied by nothing more than a name

    sprung out a beginning

    of something
    told as a story now"

    Damn impressive work, hon.

  • Suzanne Dia
    March 25, 2008

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    Busy busy mind you have, lady.
    Tuesday brings fresh exhaustion when sleep escapes into restless dreams.



    • NurseChilly gold member
      March 25, 2008
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      it's unravelling well at the moment and slotting back into all the right places

      cause I got my sistahs on my side, with large pants and lots of elastic


  • Dalaney gold member
    March 25, 2008
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    outstanding. You always take me where I never expect to go. Love, Lane


  • misselaineous
    March 25, 2008

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    mither is such a great word

    how it is in your world...
    and you write it so well

    • NurseChilly gold member
      March 25, 2008
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      if we don't meet for some gin soon, i think i may go mad....

      ahh wait a minute, i already am mad.. ahh well

      lolol

      mithering gits, my dad said it three times yesterday about salesmen in Curry's ... he was most disgruntled...

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