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An emotion moves one to choose
To want to choose an emotion.

So are the objects of our love chosen?
What's the relation of envy & justice in motion?

The best part is...
It's all free!  FREE!  FREEeeeeeeeeeee!

Like a safe cigarette,
The demon of philoso-fee.

EMOTIONS
     Fear
   Drugs
EMOTIONS

                                                                            Isolation & suicide

Author notes

only when emotions are their most raw, do many see the naked truth.  A touch burns the tender skin.
Written December 6th, 2003

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  • pulsating
    October 5, 2004
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    is currently manic. hehehehehheheheheh
    don't you love those magnets on the fridge?

    Son of a biscuit. This is some great stuff. and yes it can lead to isolation and suicide if we let emotions over power us. one is three doors down, well not really lol, (just kidding )but it's been pretty close before, has not it been for the LOT of us. It's all being worked on with therapy and groups/meds and all of that horseshit and then we are all on our merry way. It doesn't feel like it's a choice to feel like this anymore sometimes though ya know. It just feels like it is what it is and THATS the philosophy of it. I guess it is a choice to a degree, the way i look at it is perhaps i never chose to be bipolar but i sure as fuck chose the elements that may have triggered it(like drugs and being emotionally upset at 16) but then again it may be a catch 22. I am still dying at horus8's comment. You must have had a field day with that one, okay anyway I don't need to disclose my whole history in here. Just provide the synopsis and the brief. Little crap-sheets. This read in waves, like I was reading someone's heartbeat and it was in the crazy stage then flat, than normal, it was all over the map and well yeah. But i always feel a bit smarter after reading your work. I don't know. it all comes in threes though does it not? The world just seems to hand you adversity when your not ready, but who says it's when your ready, why is it up to you? or why is it not up to you, who will it be up to then? I need to go back to more meetings than i go to. I remember going to the squirrely meetings at 10 o clock at night(AA) but those were like 13th step meetings for people so i split, so anyway but what makes it so hard to understand it that emotions are SO out of control that way and people not being in control at all you would think that would be bothersome. I never really could grasp that at all you know. Well anyway I'm just carrying on right, like you give even half a shit about all this. I would not be surprised if you thought i was a complete nutjob, which i would confirm by the way. Maybe you cand read this and then be like the movie eternal sunshine and just erase it from your memory k? great, take care. Olivia


  • Wizzy Jo
    March 7, 2004
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    brilliant and different

    this was very good its different to most other poems and i like it! well done and thanks so much for sharig this.
    rowena jo
    P.S. read some of my poems if ya like?


  • qnhoneybee
    February 23, 2004
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    I like the way you set this up. It made the poem more interesting to read with a more dramatic effect. I think emotions are quite tricky and you pose a great point in here. It is often asked do we choose emotions or do they choose us? I do love your author's comment and find it quite true!
    Edited on Feb 23, 8:14 because 'I totally lost my mind!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!'.

  • NotYourCupOfTea
    February 16, 2004
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    Great picture.
    I like the question of how choices are made.


  • Carole Dudley
    January 26, 2004
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    zingy

    I bow low to the guru in your mind. Good job. Love it.


  • January 24, 2004
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    great

    i love this poem, as i do all of your works. emotions are like drugs, as they change our perspective and way we think/act. both are quite powerful and i am very glad that you put them in a poem TOGETHER, as they relate to each other much so. hopefully i will only have to deal with my emotions and not the drugs because then it would be like having two different emotions at once, twice as hard to handle as i can barely handle my own emotions now. thank you so much for posting this here, it was a great read.


  • horus8 gold member
    January 6, 2004
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    I once got in a fight with drugs in this alley back in my hood by the Suburbian 7 eleven, and unfortunately it left me in such a shambles that when I regained my composer I was still squezing my pocket protecter probing for a pen to get the license plate number, of course, I failed miserably and only jotted down, Ahhh? So one can only assume drugs lived on to fight another day... at my lack of being prudent.
    Edited on Jan 07 because ''.

  • dccrunner
    December 30, 2003
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    What made this poem for me was the way it was formatted. The size of the words and the way everything was laid out really added to the whole poem for me. Thanks for sharing
    Elizabeth


  • TillyMay
    December 14, 2003
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    Emotions don't always bring clarity for the truth...in fact they often times cloud it. What I'm "feeling" is not always an accurate gauge of reality. Emotions are tricky and can force us to see things, or obscure them completely. Loved the poem, and cheers for making me think this morning. x

  • Ms McGuiver
    December 13, 2003
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    and once again - I quote GI Jane. "Pain is your friend... it lets you know you're not dead yet!" while I prefer to chose happier emotions as the arena where I spend most of my time, I am not immune to pain, and - like you - realize that when I spend extended amounts of time there - it is because I choose to...

    the picture?? creepy - have to wonder what that guy was on... red eyes are just NOT normal! *shivers*

  • -Christine-
    December 12, 2003
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    Wow...that poem was so deep!! The effects were really awesome. And with the fonts and all. Really great.

    And by the way, I really like that picture!!

    Christine

  • educatedREDNECK
    December 11, 2003
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    Like Woohhoo that was great your words craw deep into my emotions and plays with the way i sense things while reading this it was a great write


  • Blondita
    December 10, 2003
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    While we generally have the choice to choose or deny life - and maintain some control over our emotions - it's not always easy to exert complete control over powerful emotions such as hurt and anger - passion or love...

    I have always found it difficult to master emotion - sometimes they just exist within and we have to run with what we feel inside - let them take their natural course , ya know ? It's unhealthy to dwell on them for longer than necessary , I think thats when self pity can surface... but I think it's a good thing to let yourself hurt sometimes - if that makes sense ?? It's part of healing - part of life...and I think we can only truly appreciate inner serenity when we have reached the depths of anguish first...

    But you make an interesting point in a powerful write ET...

    Glad I stopped by to read it

    ~ sonia ~


  • Mari Goes gold member
    December 10, 2003
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    Different it is indeed! I agree with you, we choose our path, sorrow and happiness.
    We all get what we deserve, the action/reaction chain.
    I liked the write, and even more your comment!
    Very well done!!!
    Mari


  • Redstormy gold member
    December 9, 2003
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    Wow I have to wonder where you are at lately, spiritually I mean? These words are powerful, yet I see so much pain. Your imagery is wonderful as well.

    Red


  • December 8, 2003
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    It is never to late for a happy childhood...
    you are soo correct!
    this is why when I ride my beach cruiser down the broadwalk, I blow bubbles at people he hee
    I liked this ... stay strong

  • -Dawn-
    December 7, 2003
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    You my friend are a true existentialist and this poem tells me so {Dawn jumps up and down because she thinks she gets this}

    Yes indeed our emotions allow us the desire to choose {or not choose} thus we can also choose our emotions. Something can happen that can be 'bad' but what matters most is the attitude we take while we are suffering. That is the message I do believe that you are trying to get across to us here

    Your last lines 'Isolation & suicide' <~ yes indeed those are 'choices' all grown people are given the gift of free will. What is sometimes the problem is that people somehow never discover that about themselves and instead life is about what happens to them other than what they do to make their life happen {if that makes sense}


    Underneath your obscurity, this message made sense to me. It has been awhile but you made me remember my choices


    Thank you for this~~ thank you for being so dang smart and an incredible writer


    ~~Dawn


    Edited on Dec 07, 2:58 p.m. because ''.


  • maryannde gold member
    December 6, 2003
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    Did you WANT anyone to get past the picture and into your words? Wow...INNNNNNTEEEEEEEEEEENSE!

    Ive been in a place where emotions died. ANY emotion is preferable.

    "Like a safe cigarette
    The demon of philoso-fee."

    Excellent...I loved these lines...

    Damn...once again...your thoughts always amaze me.

    Thanks...
    Mary Ann



  • Judas Denied
    December 6, 2003
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    Happy poem here. Seems a bit cynical to me, then again I am the bitter hag-wench of AlPo(lol). The playing with words, "philoso-fee", etc., was brilliant in my opinion. Nothing is for free, we all have a price to pay. That is just how *I* read it and I hope you take no offense at my interpretation.
    Edited on Dec 06, 8:53 because 'Damn elves!'.


  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    December 6, 2003
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    In my opinion and experience, nobody has ever been thrown into an emotional fire unwillingly, except for children. When I feel bad, I choose it. When I am down in pain, the pain is the reward. My victimness is my trophy. For me, insanity is the distance between what I am and what I want (to want what I don't have is to reject what I am, and that's nuts). But I am not trying to cover all the nuances of this philosophy here, but rather taste it a little and hope it serves your long-term freedom. Peace & love. Pain is optional & it's never too late for a happy childhood. ET


  • Nyx Iscariot
    December 6, 2003
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    what if you like being burnt? or if you are thrust, unwilling into the fire?
    sometimes, emotions are not as fun as people like to make them out to be, i'd rather be dead sometimes, than feeling.

    but you have a point.

    Nyx...


  • sock monkey
    December 6, 2003
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    Strange cause, stranger effect! I am impressed by the font technique, it just heightens the effect of it being a dark proclamation.

  • SeraphsSoliloquy
    December 6, 2003
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    cool like an ice cube

    "Like a safe cigarette,
    The demon of philoso-fee.

    EMOTIONS
    Fear
    Drugs
    EMOTIONS

    Isolation & suicide"

    that was my favorite part of the poem, although I don't know what the relationship is of the title to the piece, that's what caused me to check the poem out. I think the thought process was "sandwiches...mmmm". I agree the use of font really impacts the peice and the reader. A pleasure to read, well done.


  • saltine796
    December 6, 2003
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    Strange . . . but magnificently done. I understand it. I love your use of fonts. Great work. Bravo! Keep up the good work.
    Peace. Lord bless you.


    ~Andy

  • Odyssey
    December 6, 2003
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    Different...

    Liked the presentation, the way the last line is isolated from the body of the poem, the odd font sizes somehow work to add to the distorted feeling of the piece.

    The continual cycle of emotion, contemplating our decisions, the good, bad and ugly of it,

    The take it home now and pay for it later attitude that in the end rusts our balances to dust...

    All the ways it seems easier to get away from it...

    And the way isolation can make you feel very very small...

    Powerful piece.
    Edited on Dec 06, 1:27 because ''.


  • Satine Auror
    December 6, 2003
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    "An emotion moves one to choose
    To want to choose an emotion."

    I absolutely love this line! And god it is just too damn true!everything is a damn emotion when you really think it all through. I found this short piece damn amazing. Something I can't describe really touched me about it and provoked my thought more then other poems do on this site. Hmmm, you'll be keeping me up with thought a little longer tonight (ahh, I shall be tired at work in the morning). All I can say is Bravo! I'll have to make sure to look into your other work. Please do keep writing my friend!

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