Cocooned
in your arms,
the silk
of your kiss
gives me
butterflies
as your
caterpillar
inches up
my inner
thigh.
A contest entry
- picture prompt... by Lavender Butterfly.
400 points, ended March 25, 2008, 17 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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lmao is that suppose to be dirty? seriously because I went straight to the dirty place. **blushes wildly**
Ok ok...*stands in the corner and says allowed, " not everything is dirty" one hundred times.
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Ooo... I like this one! Nice job!
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shocking but in a good way
I was not expecting it to go that way, needless to say it blind-sided me. It brought a smile to my face and then i shared it with some non-ap members (high eyebrows all around). It took talent to create this, good job! -
the visual that you leave the reader with!! a genuinely sensuous and romantic write deserving of an honorable mention. congratulations
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slightly steamy , I like the bluntness yet its a hidden bluntness to it , it flows well and isn't drawn out at all its straight to the point and I like that ! good job ...
Julie -
nice imagery, it tickles my fancy!
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Woo-hoo!
A piece of rude romance that picks out a moment without further explanation - and with a certain air of naughtiness ;-)
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Oh! So nicely done. I was contemplating this contest, but felt I could not do it justice. You have done excellently with the prompt.
Well wishes in the contest.
Thank you for sharing.
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While this poem is wildly sensual and provocative it causes my mind to drift elsewhere. The thoughts of the caterpillar inching...tickling, the feather light breeze of the butterflies wings (if you are lucky enough to be that close)makes me think of butterfly kisses. And yet I sit here and wonder, how does the butterfly feel when it takes its first flight? Which leads me to wonder even more...how lucky a butterfly is. As this is one creature that not only was nurtured and born of Mother Earth, inched along a blade of grass, up a flower stem...but also flies within the currents of Father Sky. Looking at the blade of grass, the flower from a whole different perspective. I wonder how many creatures get to do that. Walk the earth and then fly above it all in one lifetime. Amazing huh? Good luck in the contest...as always, you push my thoughts forward.
~Michelle~
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LOL Well done poet. Excellent word-smitting, as always. One.
Dez
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Wow...steamy. I love the wording, superbly penned. All the best in the contest
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Nice
Well done a lovely piece. All the best to you.
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Truly sensual with deep imagery and creativity... x Thanks ever so much for sharing this and many blessings to you too... x Lavender Butterfly.
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Very Sensual, Very Visual! Love IT
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And the genius of Artis continues!!
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good
I think this is so cute and sweet. I loved it. I'll be lookin for ur new posts
DARAN
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you know i'm lovin this, as usual 
best of luck in the contest. be well and be blessed
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