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First Times

Without promise I fell
deeply wrapped up in desire

your touch inspired me
to paradise I was saving;


no was out of the question
under the old willow tree

she heard me moaning
my first time of many


Sweet Texas sunset aglow
I whispered do it again!

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inspiration: fornication

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  • Loveandblessings2u gold member
    March 29, 2008

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    Oh WoW this is just so down right lovely,
    real sweet and touches the heart.
    I can remember the first of many.
    Your ending is so perfect,
    beautifully written.

    loveandblessings2u & yours always
    Joyce


  • Ephiphany
    March 27, 2008

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    commenting again for the group...still a wonderful piece.
    Lady


  • Ephiphany
    March 25, 2008
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    Loved ur take on the prompt, Godmother...
    Good luck and keep writing.

    Much love,
    Lady


  • Pete Greenslade gold member
    March 25, 2008
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    under the willow tree,, how exciting..your imagination brings me all aglow good luck xx


  • ItsUrHomeboy
    March 25, 2008

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    NICE!!!

    Sweet and sensual , my favorite words and they describe this write. Beautiful imagery , keep on writin' hun


  • BeautifulFlame
    March 25, 2008

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    Amazing!

    This was wow so sensual and sweetly tender!
    A very powerful yet tender words on the subject!

    Without promise I fell
    deeply wrapped up in desire

    your touch inspired me
    to paradise I was saving;


    very well done
    ~Lisa~

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