Life dreams are mazes
with a clown faced distractions
popping up around each turn.
A physical world
where everything is black and white
but never grey.
A mind that learned long ago
to read between the lines
that should not be broken.
I hear them like glass shattering
too close not to bleed.
I AM scared by what I see.
Knowledge hurts when you
are born into ignorance.
Not a chance or a glimpse
of reality until the pain sets in.
Until you get hurt
you wont be able to understand
that life hurts.
Being a willing sacrifice for the pain
is love for life.
Just hold on.
A contest entry
- Hit me with EVERYTHING. PW OK! by z etoile.
375 points, ended March 28, 2008, 56 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Beauty In Pain! by bangbaby.
300 points, ended June 18, 2008, 91 entries
Silver trophy winner
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What do you think?
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This is cool
I can relate to this
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Very good
I really like it, the themes and ideas are powerful.
I AM scared by what I see.
Knowledge hurts when you
are born into ignorance.
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wow...from the start 'til the end...it is such an awesome write...very sincere emotions and very sad yet true wisdom in every line...moreover, your imageries are very refreshing and the ending is very uplifting...this is a captivating piece!
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a Fantastic poem you have my dear!
i loved the last part:
is love for life
just hold on!
well done so a finalist! -
Strong imagery here. I agree with the comment below. You have to live life to fully understand it. Even then, can it truly be fully understood?
Also, Life is mysterious as you never know what it will throw up, or what is around the next corner. Very well-written indeed.
Well done
Love
Wayne Leon
x
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Fascinating. The imagery was both captivating and enchanting. The only way to fully understand life is to live it. Which of course will lead to pain. Lovd it hun.
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Awesome.. I loved how you showed that until you feel the pain you don't understand this is so true awesome job!
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Powerful imagery "Until you get hurt
you wont be able to understand
that life hurts." How so very true, one can think they know, but they never will until they digest the true experience, then innocence is gone forever because now they "know". Very intense and introspective piece. Sincerely wonderful write. -
Keep on pushin,
straight ahead.
Push on through the pain.
It reminds me of my old hay daze..
...Not a chance or a glimpse
of reality until the pain sets in....
The poem points out quite exquisitely that pain and reality go hand and hand.
Know one gets out of here alive.
The world must learn to depend and hold on to one another.
Pain seeks the solitary and frightened.
Loved it.
Really got me thinkin.
Thank you lassie,
for reading my work. Your insight is a valued to this old Irish heart
Remember what me old mum told me...
Write something grand,
for you may be entertaining Angels,
Unaware.
BLESSINGS ALWAYS,
LOWELL POE.
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Most writers resolve that all fades to grey, but you choose that all is black and white. I find that to be a curious analogy? The backdrop of your piece is pain in life or from life? The trigger is getting hurt by whatever monster you describe in gray rather than black or white. This again is shadows and mirrors. You capitalized AM in reference to what the writer sees. But just what is it. Is it internal or external? The writer claims supremacy in his writing and knowledge, in his mind, but the wording seems to be elusive as to what the pain is and what the sacrifice is. I am all about being subjective, yet it would appear in this piece that the writer has created and built straw men that do not exist just to accuse them and then knock them down while never coming to grips with his own self. Silly me. Most of your work I get a handle on, but this one seems to be personal while raging at the world on my behalf. I want to rage with you, but do not know what I am raging at. Always your friend. RC
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so true. a great poem on life and all that goes with it. loved this part:
Not a chance or a glimpse
of reality until the pain sets in.
Until you get hurt
you wont be able to understand
that life hurts.
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