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His Outlet

Painted upon a canvas of gold

the artists' soul is there to behold,

each stroke of hand strategically placed

his identity painfully traced.

Both darkness and light lie there within

nostalgia of remembering when,

the carefree years he spent as a child

before abandonment to the wild.

Wants and needs mixed with lustful desires

fueled by passion ignites deadly fires,

his soul lies there for the world to see

yet he's unaware to some degree.

 

It's but an outlet for all his fears

from all he's suppressed throughout the years,

the canvas is wrought with ev'ry thought

for his spoken word still comes to naught.

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  • iamlost gold member
    March 26

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    Hoodwinked!

    Ooh, as an artist this one struck me very deeply. Your description and imagery are amazing in this piece, I love describe how much of his soul he's putting into the painting. Those last two lines are amazing, they really stand out and define this piece. I very much enjoyed reading this.

    ~lost


  • Frozentearz
    March 29, 2008

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    Oooooh my Dear one what a wonderful wonderful write
    your pen is a painter's bruch bravo to you bravo.
    Love and lIght
    Frozentearz

  • goalsv
    March 25, 2008

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    Great piece! Wonderful write, very poetic rhyme and great metephors. You captured the painters brush perfectly. Very enjoyable piece to read.


  • Celtic Legend
    March 24, 2008

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    wow this leaves me speachless! is seems as though your words can be put into a certain way so the rhyming is forced and i expected that in the second stanza. i had to reread it to make sure i knew it flowed so well! that is so wonderful! Great job!

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