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A journey to death (Long, 128 lines)

 

 

Ever since this earth's creation

 & creatures roamed its lands
Flying, crawling, slithering & walking
& ever since then, too
Sadness filled its air
The colorless space between skies and grounds
While happiness lingered far away
In the far mountains of the west.


Creatures lived in harmony together
Loving, hating & in between.
Rivers & streams ran side by side
Splashing cool, soft water on their bays.
Stars glittered in the heart of the sky
Every night the pale moon shone on the empty lands
Soft wind blew hissing songs of the past
Songs that were long forgotten
With the men that lived before
Men of honor and pride

Soft rain watered the plains
Falling on the brown, withering ground.
Burning sun shone over earth
Everyday  this world changed around.
Deserts thirsted for water.
Birds longed to fly.
Rabbits lingered in their holes
Waiting for the darkness of the shadows to die
Happiness lied dormant
Waiting for the doom of earth to come
& so did I

Like a shadow in the corner of the world
Like a dream vanishing under a blade
Like a ghost with fading ends
I've waited dormant like happiness
Friends we were to be
Holding onto each other in the darkness
Enemies announced us the destiny
Fighting each other for surviving
It's like a story of fairies
But darker, harder and more sad
It's like a dream of children
But larger, wilder and less beautiful
And there I've waited
A butterfly with broken wings


No magician could heal me
No prince of helm and spear
No prince charming could save me
No bold man of gear
I lingered still on my tree
Dying slowly with my home
Looking at the far pale horizon
Waiting for doom's arrival
Yet it never came
Alas, I've waited in vain

 

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I move my wings but the pain persists
Pressing harder than the crashing weigh of my fears
I move them again and hear a crack
Alas, my wings broke beyond repair
Rain starts falling hard
The ground rejoicing this fine mark
Small drops of grey water
Wash over me biting like a shark
Sadness still is stronger
And happiness hides in its hole

I stand still like a statue
Feeling no rain, no pain, no tears
As I close my eyes the soft wind hisses in my ear
"What have become of you, butterfly?
Why do I not see you flying happily?
Sucking from the flowers, shining your colors?"
I lift my dropped head and say singing
"All flowers withered with my life,
All my colors became pale like rain,
All my happiness died away,
& all my wings are broken weed"
The wind sighs and whispers still
"Alas, that's a bitter end for a butterfly like you to reach,
Come, come with me to the far lands
Where no harm will reach your heart
Where your soul can rest forever"
I nod my head forgetting that trust
Is the thing that led me to this doom
I trust the wind still
The invisible, untouchable thing


I flew away, carried by the wind
I closed my eyes and rested my wings
I flew high and far away
To the farthest shores, to the fields of clay
I heard the songs of elves
& felt the feathers of wings


Far to the west we traveled
Passing empty plain after empty plain
The earth was totally deserted
Yet, evil ever slept close at hand
Days and days have passed
& I was still flying on the wind
Suddenly it all went quite

The wind stopped flying
& from the seventh sky I fell
To the lowest level of earth
No cry was heard, no tears were seen
No blood was split, no pain was felt
Just emptiness and horror
Just failure and disappointment


Now even my wind abandoned me
I've trusted in the unknown

my heart explodes with shame and hurt

I regret it all
But alas, no regret would serve me now
For I've fallen and broke my heart
My soul is leaving
And my wings were ripped apart  


Author notes

Pretty old write, longest I have done yet and I don't think I can write as long as this any more. lol

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  • mcope8050
    January 23

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    OOOHHHHh this is heart felt and haert breaking,,, it makes me send the warmest of thoughts/prayers/ and wishes to you with hopes your way,,, although,,, these have been being sent your way endlessly for some time now,,, YOU KNOW THIS,,, god bless and thanks for this one!!!!!!!!,,, MICHAEL


  • Swan song gold member
    January 13

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    Like a shadow in the corner of the world
    Like a dream vanishing under a blade
    Like a ghost with fading ends
    I've waited dormant like happiness
    Friends we were to be

    Like is used a lot and I think it works in the first thee lines then in the fourth it strikes me as redundat.


    No magician could heal me
    No prince of helm and spear
    No prince charming could save me
    No bold man of gear

    For some reason this one works to me.
    I am always amzed how repeating lines like this can seem hit or miss

    I applaud your poem!!!! and I enjoyed the read.
    Please realize my somments are subjective and
    meant to help


  • SimplyNoodle
    November 25, 2008
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    you wrote this well, iam sorry youve been disapointed so much


  • sassykitty
    August 23, 2008

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    Excellent imagery and fine use of extended metaphor, this is a very well written piece which really makes the reader think deeply about the subject matter. As you say, deeply personal but a message that so many can relate to. Many thanks for sharing.


  • csAd
    August 22, 2008
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    Too nice


  • xPink-Lotusx
    March 25, 2008

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    Personal writes are the hardest for me. That is one of the reasons I am glad that I have a good imagination. I have been through a lot of hard times myself, and even though my life still isn't the way I would like it to be, I look back at the worst times in my life and realize that "It can always be worse." Something that my mom used to tell me "If it wasn't this it would be something else." Just try to get through the hard times the best you know how. This was, for me, a very wonderful write. I wish you good luck in your pursuit for happiness, but remember, there are some things you just have to meet half way or let them come to you.. Trying to hard can be the equivalent of not trying hard enough.. Very well done.


  • PatheticKt
    March 25, 2008

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    the beautiful words here fabricating
    a heartbreaking theme are what made me
    read this more even though
    it was in an epic kind of form.
    anyway, there will always be disappointments in life
    but soon they'll evolve into happiness, right?
    and the pain, weirdly, can actually make you learn
    to face the future obstacles in life =]
    hope you'll find the time one day to smile once again ^^


  • Metaphorist
    March 24, 2008

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    I second what TabbyJoy said. After all, once you have survived so much and been so down, there can only be blue skies ahead. It can't always be bad right? There's gotta be some clearing every once in a while. I hope you find it. Enjoyed this piece nonetheless.


  • Sweet Temptation
    March 24, 2008
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    this is sad but really good, i hope you can find happiness. this is a great write though


  • TabbyCat
    March 24, 2008
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    Ooh..tragic, my dear. I am so sorry for you, since you said this is personal. I pray that you find happiness in the future.

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