There is a hush,
a special kind
of whispered dreams
you left behind,
it's then I curse
the earth and sky
why did you go
why did you die?
You left a murmur
on the breeze,
a lullaby
through summer's trees,
a sigh upon
each petalled flower
a dirge upon
each passing hour.
Only your specter
I can hold
until this beating
heart grows cold.
Author notes
painting by Richard Amburgy "Paris Texas"
A contest entry
- Whisper Me A Poem by MuddyKing.
600 points, ended April 10, 17 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Get Gold This Time For Your Rhyme by ambergriss.
400 points, ended April 22, 19 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Best Prewrites From March 2008 by Amaranthine Lover.
525 points, ended May 1, 41 entries
Honorable winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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This beautiful
A wonderful read. Wonderful thoughts, I had to go back and re-read because it flowed so well I didn't notice it was rhymed. Great job.
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nicely written and captured
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sigh! I can't say any more. This is a gem. Thank you so much for entering and showing it to me.
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Oh, so beautiful. You engage the the senses and emotions so tenderly here. The softness here makes the emotions tangible, but not overt and uncomfortable. A careful balance of liberty and reins. Marvelously done.
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A hauntingly beautiful write. Congratulations on winning the silver.
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Ohhh, wow. Grand penning, Di. A shock to the senses, a caress of the heart after the visceral punch. Congratulations on your silver, my Friend. Yeahhh, we loves our Muddy, don't we? 
Wanda
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gotta just say it...you know how to get me don't ya...lol
love it Di
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Wow this starts are peaceful but then shocks the reader. "whispered dreams" reads so tender. "curse" reads of anger. I suppose that's the way memories are. They can begin peaceful but as hurt creeps in, they can turn to anger. The rest of the piece moves to an quiet sorrow. I think you paint all the feelings accompanied with grief.
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Well done Di
Rhyme and meter, pretty cool I think. Was what you used to do all the time, back when you had some time.
Jim
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Touching
Very well written and very touching. All the best to you.
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haunts me
Haunts with deep feelings , I felt the pull of it , its pain and yearning..
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HOW BEAUTIFUL!!!!
We do certainly hole onto our emotions and feelings long after they are gone.
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Moving Poetry
I don't know how you do it! You've caught the sheerest streams of flowing memories in this piece so expertly and divinely well.It's an emotionally moving piece.
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