Maggot-tooth smiles bequile
Earthworm veins crawl, panicked
Desert-cracked skin, thick, sluffs
Unbitten nails claw for Aloe
Cracked cactus heads loll, oozing green stench
While Ogalala flows, wet, six feet under
Author notes
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I view the rubber dolls as people, plastic, all wanting love and yet we've managed to bring on a disaster of nuclear proportions.
And we're in shock, some still breathing, but not living, and walking through what has become ashes, blood and mud.
And, the ambulance running "foretold" shows that we knew this was coming. That it was inevitable.
The castor oil used to be thought to be the cure for all ills and, in panic, we are using it, holding on to some kind of distant hope, and there is none. It goes right through, soaking death beds with death and stench.
Sadness. Shock. Plastic is all that is left of life. This is what I see.
A contest entry
- Quirky Poetry That Actually Means Something by Sprite.
1500 points, ended April 20, 2008, 9 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Not my usual stuff. Had to stretch for this one.
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Ohhhhhhh....fanTASTIC. A worthy win, and with your special 'cut' to the special write, it's to be alleluha'ed. ( ... a word? LOL)
I loved it!
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Thank you for the opportunity. This one made me stretch and go beyond my norm, yet was an enjoyable experience.
I'll be working on more of these. Appreciate it. Thanks.
Kelly
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I explained this, also, in my author notes.
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I view the rubber dolls as people, plastic, all wanting love and yet we've managed to bring on a disaster of nuclear proportions.
And we're in shock, some still breathing, but not living, and walking through what has become ashes, blood and mud.
The castor oil used to be thought to be the cure for all ills and, in panic, we are using it, holding on to some kind of distant hope, and there is none. It goes right through, soaking death beds with death and stench.
Sadness. Shock. Plastic is all that is left of life. This is what I see. -
heads up kid, the contest holder wants you to explain two lines of the example poems in your notes to qualify in this contest.
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Sounds very stark, the earth gone dry. I love the second line. I enjoyed this quite a bit. It's sad that underneath what we see a lot more is going on that we know nothing about. This poem says to dig deeper. But most people don't.
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Yes, this poem is about digging deeper. So much is near us, right in front of us, but we are too far away with stifled ways of thinking.
A whole universe is at our beck and call, and we're too blind to know it.
Thanks for your insight as well!
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Amazing!!!!
Well you have certainly come up with some amazing imagery. Great poem. I love the line...
Unbitten nails claw for Aloe
Very creative writing. You take care, Sandy
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Cool. Neat.
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You paint a good gross picture Kelly. Sounds like she has lost her looks.
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Lol.
Actually, it's not so much about a woman or a man, but both. And then some.
Pretty gross actually. This one caused me to stretch brain cells I didn't even know I had! lol.
Kelly
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Interesting and unusual contest this was written for. Certainly fits the requirements of the contest - very quirky, weird and different, for sure.
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