sheltered by shame
seasons change the same
around the bend
same taste of flavor again
inflation on the rise
money in the bank subsides
emptied the trash only to fill once more
how can one advance somewhere
when the governments take more than their share?
med fees
high tax freeze
oil will never be loyal
where then do we turn our hate
the offering plate?
stacks of bills come by mail
vetoed until payday...
week by week
strong man turns meek
when will the stop sign be obeyed
and when will the poor have it made?
land of the free
cage of congress...
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Comments
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"when the governments take more than their share?" - I feel that "governments take" would work better as "government takes". Just an opinion.
Good political/society poem here.
-Nam
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an interesting piece thanks for entering
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Thanks for entering your poem. I found it quite accurate in the social commentary. I feel this could be expanded on however.
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Man, I've been hearing all of this from my parents lately. I'm just grateful that I'm still a kid and I don't have to worry about it quite yet. Really wonderful write. Thanks for entering and good luck with the other contests.
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Political, but enjoyable to read as well. I like the way you didn't bang on abotu stuff and rant and rave, but used some great rhyme and poetry to get your opinion out.
Thankyou for entering and good luck
Katie -
Great piece. 100% agree. We are all prisoners of the government. They say they do what's best for us, but the end product is the opposite. Well done.
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(ps... clever w/the background )
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Very strong message comes out through yoru words. I love how it sounds in your mind as you read it ... glad I got the chance
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ooohh...a strong statement here. Managed to evoke some emotion with a political piece. nicely done.
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This really good. I hope you did well in the contest. Sorry it took me so long to return the favor. ^_^
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good job this is a great statement of life in america theese days.
good job
good luck
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I absolutly love this! Honestly, I can't think of a single thing I don't like.
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