Twisted within the stains of time,
blemishes engulf the repent mind.
Ebony tears of penance fall,
replayed regret comes to call.
Breathing in the inferno's blaze,
fatigued thoughts are heavily dazed.
Futures crumble, unfolding despair.
shattered dreams beyond repair.
Dark spheres fall, sorrows cascade,
trying hard, yet losing the crusade.
opportunity's now have disappeared,
consequences will be severe.
Unknown arbitrators will sit and debate,
helpless, I cannot clean his slate.
Shadows squirm within dark abodes.
grenade filled mind, bends then implodes.
No idea where the futures now bound
penetrating sorrow is deeply profound.
Harsh tears cried till voice hoarse,
flooded with fear, regret and remorse.
In a state of suspended apprehension,
body and mind splitting with tension.
Nothing to do except sit and wait,
the futures now in the hands of fate.
Author notes
prompt; "A change in my life"
My son has got himself into some trouble. So all we seem to be doing at the moment is waiting on tender hooks.
A contest entry
- Ten Thousand Points of Rhyme - The Invitational! Named Poets Only by cricketjeff.
6500 points, ended April 4, 2008, 17 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Well done!!
Beautiful art unfolds,
poetic lines are not untold...
with grace and finesse
you carve artisticness...
Well done.
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Excellent
Wonderful creation for the them. So touching and well expressed. Best of luck in the contest.
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Wow.. No offence but I don't think I've yet read a poem with "big" words like that yet..lol. I really liked this one.. The emotion in it was great.. I hope that your son is doing better.
Peace to you, Jetleena
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Brilliant
A Brilliant write that commands from start to finish the readers attention. The story line is well delivered flowing from one stanza to the next really well. The poem holds sad under tones almost allowing the reader to feel the tention within it. Another great write all the best and good luck in this contest Brian.
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Great wording! Full of emotion and images and reads well.
It's not easy waiting for someone else to decide your future - very stressful! Hope everything turns out ok.
best wishes in your contest.
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So wonderfully written hunny!! Your words choices are powerful and really tell this story... so hard to be waiting on tender hooks for others to decide your fate.
Much love to you hun... hope it all works out and justice prevails.
Fantastic poem!!!!
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a fine poem , about a problem afflicting many of us, well unburdened and versed good luck xx
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excellent poem! beautiful flow...blessings always~ best to you in the contest~ Trisha
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Taking out the subject matter, which i am sure is worrying, I think you have penned a wonderful flowing piece of poetry here.Excellent rhyme great meter. A read well worth clicking on Good luck in the contest
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i love it...
i love how the words flow together.. i love the way its worded.. and i love how it comes together
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