Waiting
always waiting
always waiting on my own
for you to call or phone
waiting...
Watching
always watching
always watching for your face
to fill this frigid space
watching...
Stumbling
always stumbling
always stumbling into things
still letting you pull strings
stumbling...
Lying
always lying
always lying to myself
filed failures on the shelf
lying...
Sleeping
always sleeping
always sleeping cold alone
for my sins I atone
sleeping...
Crying
always crying
always crying on my own
aching for barbitone
crying...
Author notes
OPTION 4
A contest entry
- While We Tear Our Sky Apart (Big Points, Options Inside) by Eternally Fallen.
3000 points, ended April 12, 2008, 20 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The Painful Side Of Love by Blooming Poet.
575 points, ended March 28, 2008, 38 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - your favorite prewriite or a fesh write by serenity silvermoon.
600 points, ended March 31, 2008, 45 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - come one come all lyrics wanted!!! by diabeticboy.
1050 points, ended April 15, 2008, 30 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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very good poem i invisioned it in my mind as being whispered with nothing but a nice bass in the back ground. good luck in the contest and thnk you for entering!!!
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All of these are feelings we naturally get with breakups. we start felling like falures, we cry out our pain, we sleep away lonely nights, we hope they will come back. youu captured all these very well.
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What option?
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its option 4, and i like this one
one of my favs.
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its good its differnt but yet its very boring its the same thing over and over just couple words different. you could done alittle more to it.
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Wow, I really did like this one. It looks good the way you have set it out and I love the way it sinks down and down into depression. You have to find a contest for this one, it really stands out. Realistic and very well done
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