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mellifluous earthquake

i feel the shudder within myself,
so pleasant to hear again.

i feel the old bricks fall,
ready to be replaced by the new.

i feel the cracks across the ground,
pulling those down who unworthy.

purified, dignified, the earth anew,
a mellifluous earthquake,

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  • Midgetbridgey
    May 28, 2008
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    I will comment after the contest finishes
    Best of Luck


  • Angieh
    April 4, 2008

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    This came out wonderfully. I love the writing style, it so works here. My favorite line: i feel the bricks fall,
    ready to be reaplaced by the new.
    Good luck in the contest.