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Blessings on Film

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Blessings on Film

Uncharted seas of open mind
I captured the soul of the Earth
A cameras’ eye has now enshrined
With glorious beauty and worth

I captured the soul of the Earth
As skies touched the face of the sea
With glorious beauty and worth
Blessing my life, abundantly

As skies touched the face of the sea
With loving arms ‘round flowing waves
Blessing my life, abundantly
For the shutter of mind engraves

With loving arms ‘round flowing waves
A power and strength from above
For the shutter of mind engraves
On film I have captured the love

A power and strength from above
A cameras’ eye has now enshrined
On film I have captured the love
Uncharted seas of open mind

 

 

 

Author notes

 Photo by: RedAquarius

Pantoum Poetry:
The pantoum consists of a series of quatrains rhyming ABAB in which the second and fourth lines of a quatrain recur as the first and third lines in the succeeding quatrain; each quatrain introduces a new second rhyme as BCBC, CDCD. The first line of the series recurs as the last line of the closing quatrain, and third line of the poem recurs as the second line of the closing quatrain, rhyming ZAZA.

The design is simple:

Line 1
Line 2
Line 3
Line 4

Line 5 (repeat of line 2)
Line 6
Line 7 (repeat of line 4)
Line 8

Continue with as many stanzas as you wish, but the ending stanza then repeats the second and fourth lines of the previous stanza (as its first and third lines), and also repeats the third line of the first stanza, as its second line, and the first line of the first stanza as its fourth. So the first line of the poem is also the last.

Last stanza:

Line 2 of previous stanza
Line 3 of first stanza
Line 4 of previous stanza
Line 1 of first stanza

Source: shadowpoetry.com

 

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  • RedAquarius
    April 6, 2008
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    I'm glad you entered, since I chose a form contest hoping you would. Only one eensy mistake - one line says "her loving arms" and one says "with loving arms" - since it is a repeat (please correct me if I am wrong in this), they would need to match. Otherwise, this is flawless and beautiful.


    • Amera gold member
      April 6, 2008
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      You're right! Yikes! What a dumb mistake, thanks for the catch; I fixed it.


      • RedAquarius
        April 6, 2008

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        No biggie, I didn't even catch it till my 3rd time reading. So obviously it's way minor!


  • Swan song gold member
    March 29, 2008

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    Excellent and a lovely chant on this one. Everything ehre is perfect as far as i can tell. Good luck dear


  • Ithica silver member
    March 27, 2008

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    whew! I was going for a dozen... fingers got tired!!! Beautiful!


  • Desire gold member
    March 26, 2008

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    Wow!!

    Gosh is there any form You have not tried and penned so eloquently
    Oh My!!

    Loved this one You have penned!
    Gorgeous piece and form chosen

    Thank You for sharing Your Talent and Spirit~
    Many blessings to You in the contest Sweet Soul
    Best wishes too
    and much love~ Desire~*~


  • HaleyMary
    March 24, 2008

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    Beautiful write, Sis. I liked the second stanza the best. It makes me think of how beautiful and precious the Earth is and of how I don't think it's appreciated enough in life. Wonderful poetic form. All your writes are so amazing. Keep that pen flowing always and best of luck in the contest.


  • StarEyes
    March 24, 2008

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    You are beyond words!! This is just amazing! I am not adventurous enough to try something like this yet Wow! you know soooooo many forms, and all of them just outstanding when you write in them!

    Best of luck in this contest!!

    and love

    Nyetta


  • cricketjeff gold member
    March 24, 2008

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    Adventurous and successful meter, especially read aloud. Repetition is good and each stanza works, very nice poem, very good indeed.
    I'm not feeling very inspired so no pantoum response, sorry :-( maybe later.

    • cricketjeff gold member
      March 25, 2008
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      The meter that you used today
      A perfect rhyme and flow of verse
      You have the confidence to play
      We love to watch as you rehearse

      The way you rhyme and flow your verse
      So free and yet controlled at will
      We love to watch as you rehearse
      To see you hone your special skill

      So free and yet controlled at will
      A poet who can learn and grow
      To see you hone your special skill
      And put the very best on show

      A poet who can learn and grow
      You have the confidence to play
      And put the very best on show
      The meter that you used today


  • Mairi bheag gold member
    March 24, 2008

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    There is actually an under-flow of shifting rhythm to this which I can only assume is deliberate. Good luck in the contest, Sis.

    • Amera gold member
      March 24, 2008

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      Thank you, you must have read it out loud. Do you think I should have made it a full stop after the spondee before the word "abundently"?


  • PerVirtuous
    March 24, 2008

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    This is very lovely and has a very deep metaphor. You have captured this image and made it your own. It is beautiful and sanguine. A perfect Pantoum. I love you.

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