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Those Eyes…

Millions of eyes seek their prize
Is that saying true?
It’s all in the eyes
Heat then, is not the only thing that melts

Her voice disarms
Her charm massages
Her tiny fingers linger in my mind
This undeserving heart wonders

Do the eyes have it?
Piercing me
I’m on the ledge of gratitude
Flash flooding buckles these knees

I knew it for a while
There was buried treasure protected in the darkness
Those sounds of thuds and thumps
And fluttering waves jarred the surface

With instruments of precision
With determination
Bewilderment, beckoned my way
Fantastically, 3 seasons peeled away their contributions

These two ungrateful eyes couldn’t fathom
The limits of a mind’s vocabulary was reached
Suffering under the weight of cluelessness
How does she do it?

(As if her eyes weren’t enough)

Then she smiles…
And 5 years later I have no defense against it
It’s not the jewels in the earth that are precious
It’s the ones from our mothers…

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  • ears2hearyou gold member
    August 17
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    That last verse is powerful indeed!

    "it is not the jewels on earth that are most precious..it is
    the beauty of our mothers eyes lovingly revealed."

    inspiring..thankyou for sharing this beautiful poem
    with us!
    ears/Seattle







    • AsIThink gold member
      August 17
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      Wow...(and if I didn't know any better, I'd think you were on a 'wow'ing' spree...hahaha). This is a very touching comment! I didn't add any author notes but it's about my 5 year old daughther. She disarms me without any weapons. Just the power of her love. "Humbled again...". Thank you very, very much for this great feedback.

      AsIThink...

  • AnotherName
    June 23

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    "I’m on the ledge of gratitude
    Flash flooding buckles these knees"


    I am not a parent nor do I have brothers or sisters but the eyes of the children of my friends create these emotions in me.

    Great work! I like your screen name.


    • AsIThink gold member
      June 23
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      Thank you very much for the warmth and kindness in your words. I really appreciate you taking your time out to read these words here. Wow, thanks (I think you're the first...to like comment on my screen name I mean - lol).
  • albymyheart gold member
    June 13

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    Exquiste poem. You write with a feather pen tickling unseen thoughts onto the page. I loved this...alby


    • AsIThink gold member
      June 13
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      Now, that's quite poetic...very nice comments here. Thank you very much. (But most times, I use the key pad...lol). So glad this had that effect on you...wow.

  • Bean Sidhe gold member
    June 7

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    This is perfect. The impossible can be accomplished through our children. You have strung together a collection of words to create a work of art.

    Beautiful.


    • AsIThink gold member
      June 8

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      Thank you so much. This is a beautiful comment. Simply wonderful. Yeah, what grace was given to us with them is hard to define. Even hard times can be lightened when a child(ren) tells you how much he or she loves you; how great (they think) you are...wow. Thank you again for taking the time out of your life to read something I've written.
  • That is one very lucky little girl this was written so beautifully..simply amazing from beginning to end

    • AsIThink gold member
      May 14
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      I don't know who's luckier I guess. I think it's me; she thinks it's her. But she'll sometimes say, "Daddy, aren't we so lucky to have each other?" Hmmmm...what can I say to that (other than, "yeah, yeah we sure are"). Thanks so much for your warmth and kindness. Thank you for this read.
  • YOUR WORDS SEEM TO CAPTURE THE PURE ESSENCE OF LOVE SO PERFECTLY GIFTED YOU ARE MY FRIEND GOD BLESS...


    • AsIThink gold member
      May 13
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      Thanks to your gifted eyes and ears, this piece has seen the light of another day. You make this piece more meaningful by your review of it and enjoyment too. I honestly appreciate the visit here and hope you come more often. I will be by to visit your pages after this comment (God-willing).

  • secberm
    May 8

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    Wonderfully done, poet. Very capitvating write. Not at all what I expected. A very pleasant surprise. Thanks for sharing. Write on. One.

    Dez


    • AsIThink gold member
      May 8
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      Bro., thanks for your inspiring feedback. There is much more I'm sure is left unsaid about a parents love for their child(ren). Let alone a father's love for his daughter (lol). She's in me and I'm in her...your kind words mean a lot to me. Thanks again.

      ---AsIThink...

  • ears2hearyou gold member
    April 27

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    Loved this....

    really captures us from the beginning to the end,
    and the last line made us all sigh...and run to call
    our mom's! loved it! deep is your soul, fearless
    and bold too!
    ears/granny in Seattle.


  • xPink-Lotusx
    April 16
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    Stupefied is the word I formerly lost. Pure silk on the brain, smooth like a cherry icee in the summer, or a hot cappuccino in the winter... The lyrical quality of your work, blows me completely away! Amazing flow and rhyme and always some kind of story or message being put forth. Entertainment at its finest..


    • AsIThink gold member
      April 16
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      lol...girl, you are so funny (in a good way). Who paid hired you (to say all this great stuff...?) lol. Where have you been all my (so short) AP life? lol... This is a definately a poetic-adrenaline boost if I ever had one. You're making it hard for me to keep my straight ('stone') face. I am very, very grateful for your incredibly wonderful comments. (Too good to be true...?)...lol.

      • xPink-Lotusx
        April 16
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        Good work should be shared and in turn praised for what it is. Now I only know that I love it.. And it is really hard to buy my opinion.. Im pretty honest and blunt in nature.. I speak pretty much what is on my mind.. I guess you could say my filter is broken.. So no one paid me, and I love your work with all honesty. Please keep the muse alive and dancing!

        • AsIThink gold member
          April 16
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          lol...don't take these f/u's to seriously. I'm also an honest person (according to me and I think everyone I know). So my responses are light-hearted. I have no reason to doubt what you are saying. "my filter is broken"...now, that's hilarious (lol). Good descriptives you use. I joke a lot. Maybe more than I should. But I don't mean any harm. This is piece is about my daughter. If people pass it by or not, it's still how I feel about her. I love her too strongly to be bothered by neg. if they did show up. But your's are so positive and strong: wow. Thanks again and again.

  • Whisper Mckee
    March 28
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    You are then the lucky one, yes the eyes say it every time.

    • AsIThink gold member
      March 28
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      lol...they sure do. And I sure am. Thank you very much for the feedback.

  • DrunkenRam
    March 28

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    An easily relateable poem, Having Six Daughters I know this power very well, I melted long ago and am now an endless stream of: "Sure Sweetpea, anything you want"
    nice write. I likes it.

    . Rewarded 4


    • AsIThink gold member
      March 28
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      Thanks so much for this thoughtful comment. Who knows about it, knows about it...who doesn't - doesn't. But, who doesn't? lol...
      Sure Sweetpea, anything you want"...lol. Wow, now I sure do know that one.

  • moluv10
    March 25

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    Very sweet and heartfelt bro. my kids have some of the same affects on me. you gotta love them. Great job!


    • AsIThink gold member
      March 26
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      Hey, what can we say, huh? And love them we do. And melt us, they do...lol Thanks a lot for your feedback. I wish you many, many smiles and laughther with yours.

  • ScratchedAt
    March 25
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  • This is absolutely beautiful!!! It's full of powerful images and moves along very nicely!

    What a lucky little girl!

    • AsIThink gold member
      March 25
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      I'm moved by this comment of yours. I'm lucky that you took the time to read this. I think that I'm more lucky to have her than the other way around. This girl reminds me of an "emotional M&M" (she melts my heart when she's in my hands). Thank you very much for your feedback.
  • carole21
    March 25

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    sweet

    sweet write on love . . liked "Millions of eyes seek their prize" and "It's the ones from our mothers ..." good first and last lines . .

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    • AsIThink gold member
      March 25
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      Thank you. I appreciate your comments here. Glad you took the time to read this - happy that you felt that way.
  • Loved this for a number of reasons. I related to it on a personal level, an emotional level and it just flowed like water over the edge of a waterfall! Beautifully penned!

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    • AsIThink gold member
      March 25
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      I'm laughing (again)...this is a wonderfully, thoughtful comment. Plus, it's very...well - VERY poetic. lol. Nice touch (in response form). Nice form (lol). Thanks a lot for reading this piece.

  • XxTwigxX
    March 25
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    Wow, that was a captivating piece. I really enjoyed it. The lines "I knew it for a while
    There was buried treasure protected in the darkness
    Those sounds of thuds and thumps
    And fluttering waves jarred the surface" speak to me in such a way. Good write, Dear poet..Thanks for sharing it.

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    • AsIThink gold member
      March 25
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      Thank you (a great deal). I love this little girl (my daughter) so, so much. I reflected over how she tugs at my soul and then the words just came to my mind (from my heart). Your welcome (and thanks for reading it).

  • oikevois baby gold member
    March 25

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    I liked the part about having no defense against their smiles! How true is that. Great write

    ~Miley

    • AsIThink gold member
      March 25
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      (laughing...) This is funny. When they've got you, they've got you... Thanks so much for this reply.

  • eleno
    March 25
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    so much love, hmm, wow, she got you huh. I did that too. -eleno


    • AsIThink gold member
      March 25
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      lol...yeah, she sure did. Love her from way deep down... That's for comment.

  • Swangrnv
    March 24

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    PURE BEAUTY

    and love, in these words. This an outstanding dedication to one who obviously has you wrapped around her finger! yet, I know the feeling well!


    • AsIThink gold member
      March 24
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      Yeah, you called it...I was wrapped the 1st day I was trapped: her birth date. I love this little lady. Thanks for the comments (and I know you know where I'm coming from here...).
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