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Take Me

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I inhale all the essences of both pain and love

I feel the end, thunder and lightning from above

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I hold tightly in my hand my candle of life

Its burning dim, no longer will it burn bright

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I won’t beg for forgiveness, I’ve caused too much hate

I stand in the darkness to be welcomed into hell’s gate

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I was once good and kind but have fallen from grace

When I look into a mirror, the one staring at me is a disgrace

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Take me now, I refuse to shed a tear

Take me now, I will never show fear

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For I’m no longer a loving angel; I’m a dark demon

I have preyed on so many others with my evil venom

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I have felt love, but I have broken countless hearts

Please take me in the depths of hell, and tear my soul apart

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I beg of thee, take me now before it's too late

Take me now before I continue my destiny of hate

 

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  • Poetryintheblood gold member
    March 27, 2008
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    Thank you for your beautiful entry, good luck, Josie


  • poppa
    March 24, 2008

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    Wonderful write....and Im sure we have all got a little bit of sin in us lol...great take on the prompt ..
    peace
    Rob


  • Manda Kathryn Greeters member
    March 24, 2008

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    Brillant!

    Bubs you have blown the picture outta the water with this beautifully dark poem

    Just one spelling error
    For I’m 'now' longer a - 'no'

    One of your finest dark writes baby

    Best of luck

    Stay safe
    I love you, always
    ~Manda


  • JeannieD Hunter gold member
    March 24, 2008
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    Awesome take on the prompt. Very well written. Good luck in the contest.


  • LittleMoon silver member
    March 24, 2008
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    Very well done and a good blend with the picture. Good luck with this write my friend


  • Arizona Sunset
    March 24, 2008

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    beautifully dark...love the couplets you used ...wonderful flow...best to you in the contest~blessings always~ Trisha


  • Gwenevere
    March 24, 2008

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    This is a beautiful dark side.A strong emotional poem that fits the picture well.I like this a lot.Well done and good luck in tha contest.I hope you win before darkness comes!!!!!!, Ros


  • LadyDementia gold member
    March 24, 2008

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    A captivating and enthralling poem. Such beautiful imagery within. I love the darkness, superbly penned. All the best in the contest with it


  • michichoeret
    March 24, 2008
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    excellent

    love picture of "destiny of hate" and you being a darl demon by now. very nifty imagery

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