Isn't funny how candles on a lake never quite flicker the way they did for us?
Your blue eyes will always hold my heart
&& Maybe you weren't here forever;;
But you always told me,
'Eternity is what you make it'.
You looked so pale against hospital sheets.
Not a thing like Juliet
&& I guess only movie stars have pink cheeks in the end.
You always promised me,
'The end is never the end'.
Baby you know I would've hugged away the pain,
but even french kisses couldn't win my heart back.
&& you always whispered,
'Until the day I die'.
What now?
I'll always remember,
Eternity is what you make it.
Author notes
Option three 
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Comments
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Wow! So deep and beautiful.
Really felt it.
There were some major lines that really got under my skin in this one. Especially: "&& I guess only movie stars have pink cheeks in the end." -- powerful words.
So great! well done
Thanks for entering and good luck
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That is a beautiful poem. I enjoyed reading it. Very sad.
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this is an amazing write with sadness in your words that exprsses a lot. it grips the reader with emotion well done
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dIs WaS a VeRy DeEp PoEm!!!I lUvD iT!!!Im SoRrY 4uR lOsS!!!ItS vErY pAiNfUl N eMoTiOnAl!!!gUd JoB!!!! -
Thank you for entrying this poem. I've read it before and it still feels like the first time reading it. I know how this feels. goodluck
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Oh my goodness, this is heart-wrenching!!
I am so sorry for your loss.
You really expressed what it seems you needed to in this write. Is is so full of memories and emotion.
I agree with the truth written in these lines too:
You looked so pale against hospital sheets.
Not a thing like Juliet
&& I guess only movie stars have pink cheeks in the end.
I'm sure that must have been so hard for you to watch.
Excellent write from the heart!
Good luck in the contest!!
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*ummm*
i wasn't exactly taken to the clouds and back, if you get my meaning. it was a good poem, but just not what i was looking for. would you consider entering another one please?- id love to read more of your work. -
This poem is really strong and painful, and emotional to the point that I am not sure that 'beautiful' is the word that I am looking for. Still, it is really well written, and raw. But that is what pain is, after all.
Good luck and God Bless
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