Little Bo Peep was looking for sheep
But couldn't find any at all
So she asked Humpty Dumpty to have a quick look
From his seat high up on a wall
"Of course" said Humpty sitting up high
"I can see most of the land"
"Much further you know than anyone else"
"Even better if I were to stand"
Poor old Humpty overbalanced and fell
Tumbling onto the ground
Just as Little Boy Blue appeared with his horn
And saw Humpty was making no sound
"What shall we do" cried Little Boy Blue
"He really needs CPR"
"Don't worry my dear" said a voice somewhere near
It belonged to nurse Twinkle the Star
She flew over to Humpty where Little Bo Peep
Sat gently holding his hand
Then Twinkle the Star commenced CPR
And brought Humpty back to this land
Little Bo Peep never did find her sheep
Good old Humpty was fine within hours
His saviour, a Star, who knew CPR
Was rewarded with a bouquet of flowers
In a list
A contest entry
- Twisted Fairy Tales by KayJay.
700 points, ended March 26, 2008, 14 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Please enter, i'm making a baby book of poems!!! by perfectsunset.
450 points, ended May 21, 2008, 39 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Children's Poetry by Animals.
550 points, ended May 1, 40 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comments
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How wonderfully sweet, you blended these fairy tales into a charming fairy tale of your own Wonderful work, you deserve these trophies and more. I was almost aitng for the flow or rhyme to be off because it is so hard to keep it perfectly, but you accomplished this well!
Evinde -
Congratulations on all your trophys. I love the way you talk about Humpty Dumpty I Liked it when the star nurse saved him.
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Awww! Cute!
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GREAT
Oh my gosh! Thank you so much for entering! This is absolutely fantastic! I love the rhyming in it, it all fits together nicely. I'm so excited for more entries to come. You have brought a great start to this contest. Thank you for entering.
- Animals
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Awww that was cute, thanks for sharing.
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this is lovely but you need to read the rules a bit closer and you will find that the contest does not allow trophy winners. Sorry, but I must DQ.
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I like your poem it is funny
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Great entry! Really glad i opened it for this prewrite! It's really good and full of humour!
Good Luck!
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really good, i like it i agree it would be great for the contest to bad bout the no PW
♥always Katie
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This is so cute. I like the way you have brought these nursery rhyme characters together. Held my breath a little, knowing what was going to happen to poor old Humpty but it all turned out and those useless king's horses and king's men didn't even show up this time!
Who needs sheep anyway?
Nice write and congrats on your silver.
jjj
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Aww what a cute baby poem! Love the rhyme and unique version of different nursery rhymes. So beautifully done. A treasure to read!
Thanks for entering & best of luck
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Wonderful.
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this is really cute i like how you took so many classics and put them together to make a great poem, congrats on the sliver and good luck in this contest, keep writing, -Amy
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Bravo!!!
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Excellent piece a pleasure to read Congratulations on your silver award
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Hi Dereck..
Congratulations on a well deserved Silver. I found this imaginative, well rhymed, and too clever for words. Thanks for participating!
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lol!!! awsome twist. Need I say it? no I dont but I will. I love it.
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Lol. That was great Del. I loved it. You are good at these, should do some more like this.
alby
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aww, this is so sweet, i love it. great write, good luck in the contest
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awwwwwwww this is very cute
keep writing and best of luck to you
~Angelic Princess~
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its great and very cute!
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CUTE
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yo man this is so cute i hope u win the contest
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Haha.. I love it!! but then again who wouldn't.. It's just so cute.
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