Pieces of me fall away
a broken body on display
a pool of blood
a jagged knife
my last breath
a wasted life
the cold damp floor cushions my face
my body shudders in sick disgrace
a single twitch
a wretched man
my murder here
a bloodied plan
I watch my killer leave the scene
as blood congeals where he's been
a last goodbye
a finger lift
my last fuck you
my final gift.
Author notes
ok...well...as Luna would say W/E...
A contest entry
- round contest #1 by serenity silvermoon.
600 points, ended March 26, 2008, 25 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Whatever you like...
Comments
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Oooh this is very good ^.^ well done I liked it woulda given it bronze at the very least, lol...
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HOLY SMOKES!!!!
OMG!!! This one is beyond words!! What a read this one is! WOW!! the power in these words are just mind blowing!! Great job on this one my brother!!
Best of luck in this contest!!
Nevermore~
Me
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Wow powerful and bitter, love the ending, very 'up yours' Wonderful flow and rhyme. Superbly penned. All the best in the contest with it
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Awesome, i love the bitterness--one thing i noticed, in line 6 I think it should be wasted instead of waisted--great write
♥ meg
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This is very good. Very graphic but you said it all and I could see it. Keep it up.
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Holy crap!!! That's awesome!
Gruesome and defiant!!! Excellent rhyme and flow...
I'd wanna go out with a final f*^k you too if I was going this way!
Great write!
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awesome hon i always cross my fingers when reading new artist but i tell you i think this is honestly at the top of the best
good luck in the contest
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Oh this was really really good.. Kind of grafic I think and I don't like the fact that you die brither, but other then those things this was a really really good write.. This was a great write..
Peace to you , Jetleena
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