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The Sonnet of the Ex-Tea Sea

The most beautiful ocean I have seen
I'm washed away but still have my control
The white sand once was coca, was this tea?
The happiest that I have ever been
Drop down some more until I reach my goal
Submerged and drenched under the Ex-Tea Sea

I swim, I float, and I am dripping wet
My heart is full of love and full of joy
My body, mind and tongue have broken free
Get my head up and spark a cigarette
Enjoy but bear in mind it's not a toy
Always be sure: respect the Ex-Tea Sea

So take a chance and jump on in with me
We'll swim together in the ecstacy

Author notes

Option 2

This is the first poem I wrote after about three years of not writing anything, after the power of the joy I felt at the begining of my ecstacy honeymoon forced me the pick up a pen again. I consider it my "first" poem as a new poet. But for my word it is my first poem, as I don't believe any copies of my original 20 or so poems exist.

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  • fluffatron69
    April 2

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    Nice write! What form have you used?
    I enjoyed the play on words, and the way the piece is conveyed, especially how the last couplet rounded it off.


  • DemonicChanel420
    November 11, 2008

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    Very good write, I liked the imagery, it was quite a piece, the flow and rhyme schemes were good. All in all, I really like it!


  • Peachy
    June 9, 2008

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    Very clever last line, took me awhile to get it though, lol, talk about slow
    I like this poem, it certainly made me smile (and laugh at myself too; always a good sign)
    Good Luck!


  • Nam
    June 7, 2008

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    I once wrote a line using the "XTC" phrase of: "it took my ex to see that she was doing methamphetamines" etc., that was a long time ago.

    A nice poem that you have written here.

    -Nam


  • Sandra R Reynolds gold member
    May 30, 2008
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    Good write and rhyme flow,


  • bananasfoster42
    April 29, 2008

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    something i've never been able to do is be talented enough to hold myself to a certain amount of syllables or form. props to a sonneteer!


  • VerminVomit
    April 28, 2008

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    thats so cool exteasea
    exteasea exteasea
    i like it
    a lot
    thanks for entering my contest


  • eleno
    March 25, 2008

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    hmm, well to be honest i liked this one the least of the three, it just seems a little unstructured, the words and imagery are ok, but the poem overall seems messy. sorry, i myself am VERY far from pro, but this is just my impression. good luck on the contest. thanks. -eleno

  • Page Deleted.
    March 23, 2008
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    Very clever play on words, good use of poetic format and rhyme scheme, I enjoyed reading this.










    Welcome to Allpoetry and I look forwards to reading more from you.

    Keira
    Liloven

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